Winter settling in
It's been summer in my heart these past two years
It never went dark longer than a night lasts
Why, now the calendar's in a hurry and winter's settling in
I didn't see it coming
Well, you might have thought the temperature dropped
But I swear it didn't
All of the sudden the sky was clouded
Like my eyes
I think that's why I had trouble seeing your face
For what it was
And I think when the rain set in
Right above me
It must have dulled my hearing.. I didn't get one word of what you were saying
And it took weeks to accept a cloud's following my head
At times I thought I saw a rainbow's glimpse
Or the sky clearing
But it was.. wishful.. thinking
It's been raining ever since
Why, this winter's pathetic
I want snow
I want beauty in loss
And a streak of hope outside this soiled window
I want to let go
Of the memory of a time I wasn't shaking.. with doubt
And freezing at the sight of a life wrecked on a Thursday
Now I'm sitting on swings and holding my tongue
But these eyes of mine won't obey
As I'm left to count each shade of grey
And watch my beliefs slide out of view
Little I knew...
These pictures of you and me in my head
Would be the nails to my casket
I would have appreciated a few days of autumn.
cheers,
straycat.
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Lot of great images here, but I've having the devil of a time trying to hear it as a song. Probably because I'm tired and my imagination's shot... :wink:
It's funny, the first time I read this through I thought this line:
I would have appreciated a few days of autumn
was part of the song. And after a dozen-plus readings, I still think it would be a great first or end line of a chorus section.
Looking forward to more.
Peace
David
+1 to what David said. Great imagary, and the way it grows into being about 2 people, and not just the weather, is a good twist to it.
I too am having trouble hearing music for this as well; any thoughts?
Pete
ETD - Formerly "10141748 - Reincarnate"
Back with a capital B!
I know you haven't been as active as usual - but you've come up with some great lines here!
It's been summer in my heart these past two years
It never went dark longer than a night lasts
Why, now the calendar's in a hurry and winter's settling in
great opening - really sets the scene. From there, you've gone back to the old BlueNightAngel style of writing. Works a treat for me - great imagery,nice metaphors. Only thing I'm having trouble with - as mentioned by DHodge - is trying to turn this into a SONG! The rhyming scheme's a little eccentric - but then again, it could work, some of your other songs looked a bit unapproachable from a guitarists point of view, but with a little perseverance you could get really good songs out of them....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Hi Straycat
Can't argue with the writing as there are some great images in there typical of what we've come to know and love you for but does challenge the reader to put it as a song.
Good stuff
Bob :wink:
You are what you eat, eat well
hey..
thanks everyone. glad you like it. as for this being put to music... yes, i see that problem myself. in addition to my usual laziness and incompetence this was not written to be a song.. this was just my head overflowing with thoughts that have been trapped in there for weeks now. looking at my last few posts you might've noticed what's going on in my life.. i'm not really myself lately. sorry... i hope i'll get something workable done for this week.
cheers,
straycat.
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
