I never had a daughter and never wrote lyrics that didn't rhyme.
I'm sure . . . there was a reason . . .
I'll try to add two more verses . . . but it's Friday . . . here's what I got.
Little Girl Gifts
Purple skies and butterflies
Colored sprinkles on chocolate cake
Pirouettes and skipping rope
These are things little girls dream
Mommy's baby from the start
I had never played with dolls
But we found a game to play
I'd be silly and she would giggle
God gives us many gifts
One of them is little girls
To show us of another love
And what it's like to be a father
Coming home after working
With my first step in the door
Daddy's girl would run to greet me
Hugging hard until I'd lift her
Bedtime stories and piggyback rides
How to ride a bike and tie a shoe
Someone to tell them “I love youâ€
These are things little girls need
God gives us many gifts
One of them is little girls
To show us another love
And what it's like to be a father
Many years have passed since then
And our girl has been married
She visits every now and then
And brings two gifts of her own
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
Seems to work OK for me, Ken - maybe a little on the slightly over-sentimental side, but hey, we're all allowed one of those moments from time to time.
First verse is a good scene-setter; nice imagery. I've had daughters, never had any sons - and I've done pretty much all those things you mention. And yes, played with dolls too, with every one of them.
I'm not sure it needs more verses - I can see this being done as slow country, almost spoken verses - pretty minimal accompaniment. Though I think a record producer might tend to go overboard on the strings for the choruses!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
. . . maybe a little on the slightly over-sentimental side, but hey, we're all allowed one of those moments from time to time.
Yeh, sometimes I'm just a big marshmallow.
The dolls actually means babies
Mommy's baby from the start
I had never played with dolls
Being unprepared and kinda reluctant to deal with babies . . .
not wanting anything to do with poopy, gurgly, crying things . . .
so mommy gets the pleasure of dealing with the little girl at the beginning
but after a while she "stole my heart" . . . type thing
I added one verse to kind of . . . . . . not sure what that last verse does . . . . . . end it?
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
For not having a daughter, I think you've captured the essence of being a father to one excellently.
Very sentimental, very nice all around.
In Space, no one can hear me sing!
Ken,
Good job at capturing the sentiment. :D You have a good example when NOT to give too much information...the whole diaper thing :lol:
Suggestion:
Many years have passed since then
And our girl has been married
She visits every now and then
And brings two gifts of her own
Since you're using 'then' 2Xs as endings, maybe this could be changed up to integrate the the sentiment often expressed "time goes by so/too fast" or the years fly by... I'll leave the idea and let you fit in the rhyme or unrhymed lines :wink:
James
You have a good example when NOT to give too much information...the whole diaper thing :lol:
James
You don't know how tempting it was to include the whole "poop" scene into a verse. . .
Thanks, I didn't even see the "double then" . . . probably because I wasn't looking . . . at the non-rhyme.
How about that? . . . a rhyme . . . and a perfect one at that!
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
Hey KR
As the father of two girls I must you captured the sentiment very well.
John
Thanks, Joe
Thanks, John
I had to change the lyrics just a little.
Here's my attempt at singing the song . . . don't worry, I just recorded the first two verses and chorus.
(It would help if I could play the guitar and sing - just minor problems to be overcome) :mrgreen:
One chord? As New Yorkers would say, "Forget about it."
Purple skies with butterflies
Colored sprinkles on chocolate cake
Pirouettes and skipping rope
Are things of little girls' dreams
Mommy's baby from the start
I had never played with dolls
But we found a game to play
I'd be silly and she would giggle
God gives us many gifts
Some of them are little girls
To show us of another love
And what it's like to be a father
Coming home after working
With my first step in the door
Daddy's girl would run to greet me
Hugging hard until I'd lift her
Bedtime stories and piggyback rides
How to ride a bike and tie a shoe
Someone to tell them “I love youâ€
Are things that little girls need
God gives us many gifts
Some of them are little girls
To show us of another love
And what it's like to be a father
Many years have passed since then
And our girl is now married
She visits every now and then
And brings two gifts of her own
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
I have not had kids but this tugs at my heart.
Nice lyrics.
Ernie
"All battles are first won or lost in the mind." - Joan of Arc
"It took me about 20 years to figure out how to write without inspiration. Thankfully, I got there." - Leon Russell
Here's my attempt at singing the song . . . don't worry, I just recorded the first two verses and chorus.
LOL! You actually have a very good voice.
So I have dial-up at home and waited for this to load, I wanted to hear how you put this to music, and it's very pleasant to listen to. It kind of gives me the feel of a bed-time song even though the lyrics are more reflective.
Nice job, really love the lyrics.
In Space, no one can hear me sing!
Thanks, Joe.
I'm really surprised that it sounded as good as it did without the rhymes.
I didn't think it would - but it didn't seem to matter as much as I thought it would.
I'll have to re-evaluate this whole rhyme thing.
James sent me an article in PM regarding rhyming which answered a question I had about changing rhyme schemes during the song and a lot more.
So I've learned not to be so hung up on rhyming . . . . maybe use a scheme like ABBC in the future.
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
Very Precious! Yes my little girl all grown up but great memories one can bring out with song and you did it!
thank you
Julia
Sounding nice from here, KR2. Your voice is nothing to be ashamed of at all - tuneful and mellow.
I do have a suggestion re your guitar playing, though - like me, you've got large hands and long fingers. I've always found it relatively easy to change from this C chord.....
.....to this F chord......
....without the need for a barre.
I know it's supposed to be bad form to bring the thumb over, but there are plenty of good, even great guitarists (Hendrix, Page, Springsteen etc) who do. If you look at the first picture, I'm playing the G note at the 3rd fret of the bottom E string with my ring finger....the full chord is 332010. My thumb's just over the neck of the guitar, ready for the change to F. Now look at the next picture - see how little movement there is between the two chords? Basically, I've shifted the bottom three fingers across a fret, used my thumb for the F note on the E string and flattened my index finger down to get the F note on the top E string - the full chord's 133211, same as a barred F chord, but I find it ten times easier to change quickly.
I wouldn't recommend it for someone with small hands, but hey, give it a try - you might just find it easier. I know I do!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
i like it
hmm... never realized I was using bad form!! don't know any other way to play a DaddF# - I also regularly use my thumb if I want to mute my low E string.
jeremy
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