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(@jamestoffee)
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Y8W45 Midnight Snacks

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=9614150

Manpower dines opposite Ego
Midnight's aggressive and overly emo
I'm self-conscious as they eat living mud
Mixed with soldiers' flesh and blood
Seasoned with rose petals placed on graves by their wives
Sprinkled with tear drops and fatherless lullabies

Chorus
Snacks for Midnight and her guests
Manpower, Ego and the rest
Such voracious appetites
Midnight snacks of every shape and size

Lost in a flurry of activity
I wonder aloud absent-mindedly
Should I have tried to ask for help?
Drawing awkward attention to myself
Ego stops mid-reach as valor drips down his beard
We lock eyes for a moment or maybe a hundred million years

chorus

Even after Midnight expires the breeze will remind me of her
I will reflect over her as I negotiate the next recipe
Most likely she'd have my heart on a silver platter

chorus


   
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(@olivernorth23)
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Hey James,

First off, it's nice to hear a different style of music! As for the song, when I read the lyrics i didn't get the rhythm, but when I heard it I really liked the phrasing. The chorus melody was pretty catchy too. Nice work man!


   
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 KR2
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Always a challenge to figure out what your song is based on.
But you have me stumped on this one.

If it's a book, let me suggest instead of "Night of the Living Dead" maybe a romantic comedy. :lol:

You aren't having bad dreams are you? :mrgreen:

Seriously, it was a pleasure to hear another one from you.
It's amazing that you are still cranking these songs out . . .
and now experimenting with your voice-a-ma-gidget, I see.
I like the voice overlays (if that's what they're called).

Seasoned with rose petals . . . placed on their graves by their wives

has a haunting feeling to it. I like.

Next line maybe

Sprinkled with tear drops and fatherless lullabies

Good job, James

It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.


   
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Hi olivernorth23,

Thanks for the listen and feedback :D

Hey Ken,

Romantic comedy huh? :P
You aren't having bad dreams are you? :mrgreen:
Well the worst bad dream is writer's block so if bad dreams give me something to write about, there in lies the silver lining :wink:
Sprinkled with tear drops and fatherless lullabies
I like the word 'sprinkled' the daisy chain was to symbolize the daughter, but I'll keep thinking on that one....thanks
Always a challenge to figure out what your song is based on.
But you have me stumped on this one.
:twisted: Yes, you can't GOOGLE your way out of this one :twisted:
I went on the notion that our minds crave to put things in order or make sense or connections; which is often viewed as "counter-creative", so I tried to use that desire to "organize" the disorganized and did something similar to Vic's assignment of putting random sentences together. I had come across this web site that can randomly generate paragraphs:
http://watchout4snakes.com/CreativityTools/RandomParagraph/RandomParagraph.aspx

So I put in the words "midnight" as the primary subject [planned as that was the assignment] and "miniature" as the secondary subject [random word generated] and I tried to "find the story" within the jumble. This is the paragraph that it produced:

The manpower dines opposite the ego. Midnight thumbs the sexual verse under a wonderful knight. Midnight humbles a connected appearance. Miniature shies away against the lively mud. Midnight declines opposite the disconnected snail. Midnight bounces around a premature north.

The intermittent backlog pretends miniature. A bay proceeds. Miniature decays under another sunlight. Should the hardback help cry? Midnight stays the synonym outside the newest load. Miniature leans against Midnight.

A badge consents underneath miniature. Midnight waits. A dilemma supports the strong combat. After miniature expires Midnight.

The impulse breezes with miniature. Miniature reflects over Midnight. Midnight negotiates miniature next to a recipe. Midnight portrays a compelled heart.

You might see the bits I pulled out and left behind as well :roll: Since I made the connections for myself, I wasn't really sure what another listener would think about it, so thanks for the feedback :D

Now the easiest way I can think of to write a song is go to grab a random paragraph then run it through the "Let them Sing it for you".....
http://sverigesradio.se/p1/src/sing/ #
I venture that most of what you get will be not worth listening to.....maybe even all of it....but who knows where these muses like to hang out :roll:
....but like you said:
Thanks for sharing that with us, James.
Now I know where NOT to go again.
:lol: :lol: :lol:
James

PS POOF petals and drops in the recipe :mrgreen:


   
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Let them sing it for you? Interesting websight, good for a laugh... I'm guessing soon that's were all pop music will from. Funny how with even a single word from some songs you still know exactly who is singing it and from what song.

And with random sentence generators, we can say our disturbing songs aren't our fault! Randomness aside, I found this line a little TOO random.
She portrays a compelling heart

I'd put something there that connects to the recipe, like a "compelling quiche" or something... well, maybe you can be more creative than that. Well, no one but you can be more creative that "compelling quiche".

Peace,

Jeremy

And my Soundclick Page to listen to my song submissions: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=903876


   
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we can say our disturbing songs aren't our fault!
That's what I was hoping for :roll: :roll: :roll:
I found this line a little TOO random........I'd put something there that connects to the recipe,
That's fair to say...
...thinking....thinking....thinking...... :?

Thanks for the listen and feedback :D

P.S ***POOF line "She portrays a compelling heart"
changed to
"Most likely she'd have my heart on a silver platter" :mrgreen:

Feedback?


   
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P.S ***POOF line "She portrays a compelling heart"
changed to
"Most likely she'd have my heart on a silver platter" :mrgreen:

Feedback?

Much better than the original - very much fits better with:
Snacks for Midnight and her guests

and helps us understand her menu.

Jeremy

And my Soundclick Page to listen to my song submissions: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=903876


   
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Midnight snack menu . . .

She surrendered her (warm) tender heart ?

(feeling really ghoulish today)

It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.


   
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(feeling really ghoulish today)
I think there would be room for you at the table....as the chorus states:
Snacks for Midnight and her guests
Manpower, Ego and the rest
so the attendees thus far include the following: Midnight, Ego, Manpower, and Ken :P

You could have your own special version of the song:
Snacks for Midnight let the eating begin
Manpower, Ego and don't forget Ken
:lol: .....ok....ok.....I'll digress while you digest :wink:


   
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