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wilhelmina
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Never Too Late
Y9W20 - Topic: Late

It's never too late to do a little loving.
You're never too old for another kiss or two.
If you still have one foot out of the grave,
It isn't too late for you.

It's never too late to do a little loving.
There always is time for a twenty-second squeeze.
And there might be time for even more
That makes you gasp and wheeze.

It's never too late to do a little loving.
So go right ahead and try to please her.
And what do you know, she might not be thinking
You're just a worn-out geezer.

It's never too late to do a little loving.
It's never too late to find out how.
So put your arms around her, squeeze your honey,
And do a little loving right now.


   
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martin-6
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Sweet song.
First verse is the best.
Second is just ok.
Third is a bit weaker. Not that keen on "please her / geezer".
Fourth is nice.
I would suggest that you continue to bash out a few more verses and then mercilessly delete all except the best ones.
Hope this helped, and thanks for sharing :)


   
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jamestoffee
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Good start :D
Some nice rhymes and sentiment....I'm fine with the wheezer and squeeze her.

It couldn't hurt to keep running a stream of verses to pick and choose the cream of the crop, but it's working as is as well.

Suggestion: consider playing around with the point of view and see which one has the best fit for delivering the song....I've heard that it's a good thing to try with all your songs just to see if something is strengthened in the delivery.

Thanks for sharing.


   
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wilhelmina
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All comments gratefully accepted. Thanks.


   
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