Topic: Magic
No tune on this one. I did have one in my head, but it turned out to be almost identical to the song I'd been working on previously. Is this what you call writers rut?
It was at the Goodwill store
Love took me by surprise -
Shot out a fist and punched me
Right between the eyes.
She was dark and lovely,
I had never known her kind.
But I reached out a hand to touch her
And she didn't seem to mind.
Chorus:
And was it magic?
I don't know.
But love has got a grip on me,
And it still won't let me go.
I swear I heard her whisper,
"Take me out of this old store.
You could come to love me
When you get to know me more."
What happened next is all a blur
Till we stumbled out the doors
With a voice behind us ringing,,
"Take her away, she's yours!"
Chorus:
And was it magic?
Was it fever?
But something stirred inside me
And I knew I couldn't leave her.
I took her home to meet my spouse
(I'm not afraid of scandal)
But I wonder if I may have bought
More love than I can handle!
Chorus:
And was it madness?
Eighteen frets!!!
But I take her in my arms each day.
I have no time for regrets.
I do have a melody now for Willa, the grandparent's song
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10569195
Hi Wilhelmina,
Good start :D I like the cloaking of meaning involved. I like this line "But I wonder if I may have bought
More love than I can handle!"
I kind of felt something had to set it straight b/c the second verse is down right creepy until the listener finds out it's not a woman the singer is talking about. :P
It reminds me a bit of an Oh Henry story where it appears a husband is going to run away with a mistress, but the truth in the twist isn't revealed until the end.
Girl http://www.online-literature.com/yeats/996/
Is this what you call writers rut?
:P I'm not sure, but it sure is annoying when it happens :wink:
This next comment is more personal preference:
I think the Grandparent music fits better with the Grandparent song.....
I read the words here first before listening and I was hearing more a do-whop sound like "Da Do Run Run" - The Crystals - 1963
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uTqnam1zgiw
or
Grease Lightening http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c48Ol9xkaqM
The Grandparent song has a "waltzy - 3/4 feel"....where as the lyrics here are more energized than laid back:
"took me by surprise -
Shot out a fist and punched me
Right between the eyes."
"has got a grip on me"
"What happened next is all a blur
Till we stumbled out the doors"
"Was it fever?"
"And was it madness? "
.....All nice descriptive words showing fast action or spontaneity BTW :wink:
Thanks for sharing.
James
