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Y9W47 Children of a lesser god pray

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Verse
You have the hands of a stone god
the air is thin up here
You have the breath of a chili dog
caught on the lips with cold beer

Verse
You have the taste of sun block
and cauliflower ears
You have the face of a juggernaut
a smirk so cavalier

Chorus
There's a high price for your happiness
And I'm paying for it today
There's a fine line between a trophy mount
And the one that got away

Verse
You with your hand on a fishing rod
A cooler won't calm my fears
You have the heart of a tackle box
If I had eyes they'd have tears

Bridge
If you find it quaint and not so disturbing
If you can relate and find it reassuring
Children of a lesser god pray
But that won't get in your way
Children of a lesser god pray
But that won't get in your way

Chorus
There's a high price for your happiness
And I'm paying for it today
There's a fine line between a trophy mount
And the one that got away
And I'm paying for it today
You're the one that got away
And I'm paying for it today
You're the one that got away


   
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John Sargent
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Okay, we are supposed to be writing lyrics that don't tell a clear linear story. Are we allowed questions?

Are all the lines sung by the same character or are there two characters singing separate verses?


   
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Okay, we are supposed to be writing lyrics that don't tell a clear linear story. Are we allowed questions?
Are all the lines sung by the same character or are there two characters singing separate verses?

All the lines are from one singer.....any guesses yet? :D


   
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Chris C
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Hi James,

Fascinating puzzle - very intriguing lyrics! :D

I've been too busy lately to do any songwriting myself, but I can't resist trying to solve this one.

There seem to be references to deafness ("children of a lesser god" being a story centering on that issue) and blindness ("if I had eyes") plus plenty of references to hunting/fishing etc.

So the first images (probably prompted by the word stone in the first line) were of a row of concrete gnomes doing the 'Hear no evil, see no evil, speak no evil' routine with a fishing gnome to complete the set. But that lacks a story line.... so...

There seems to be some ambivalence as to who is the catcher and who has got away in the lyrics. That fits the story of a certain "fisher of men" who was himself caught by men. There are numerous references to those who have eyes but cannot see and ears but cannot hear sprinkled through that story. So who is/are the smirking beery character(s) who are part of a juggernaut? A taunting Roman soldier perhaps? The coldly uncaring crowd, both then and now? And the thin air "up here" - could that be on a hill, on a cross? Are we hearing a version of events at Calvary here?

There's a high price for your happiness
And I'm paying for it today
There's a fine line between a trophy mount
And the one that got away
And I'm paying for it today
You're the one that got away
And I'm paying for it today
You're the one that got away

He paid the price - he was seen as a trophy but 'got away' and the final twist is that the ones who missed the point of the message from the 'fisher of men' were also the ones that got away, in a different sense. So a double meaning there - he got away through the resurrection, but the soldiers 'got away' too because the message didn't get through. Is it a case of who is really the fisherman and who is the fish here?

Or it's a song about garden gnomes.... or something else altogether... :wink: :)

Cheers,

Chris


   
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Hi Chris,
or something else altogether... :wink: :)
I really like what you came up with :mrgreen:......but it's not what I had in mind.....however, a sacrifice is involved on the part of the singer.
.....also garden gnomes is closer in location but not necessarily in concept.
....one more clue is the tension between the singer and singee......the singer being "used" by the singee and is not being valued for who they are.....but only being valued as to being used for the singee's end purposes.

.....great interpretation though :wink:

James


   
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Probably just as well that I got that one wrong - if my guess had been right I might have been tempted to make tasteless jokes about having nailed it... :oops:

It looks like I took the wrong bait.... we might be looking at a worm's eye view of things then...

And I forget to say that I enjoyed the lyrics and the song too. :)

Cheers,

Chris (also sometimes known as Charles too - it's my second name.)


   
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It looks like I took the wrong bait.... we might be looking at a worm's eye view of things then..

Good on you, Chris! :mrgreen:

The singer is a worm (or bait)

The singee is a fishman about to fish or use the worm as bait

Verse
You have the hands of a stone god …rough hands compared to a worm's body
the air is thin up here…out of the ground while the fisherman is looking at or hooking him
You have the breath of a chili dog….description of fisherman
caught on the lips with cold beer….description of fisherman continued

Verse
You have the taste of sun block……worm in fishman's hands
and cauliflower ears….strange looking since worms don't have ears
You have the face of a juggernaut…. a literal or metaphorical force regarded as mercilessly destructive and unstoppable. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Juggernaut
a smirk so cavalier….fisherman doesn't care about worm's feelings or life

Chorus
There's a high price for your happiness….fisherman wants to catch a fish
And I'm paying for it today….worm must die to catch a fish
There's a fine line between a trophy mount….Fine line is a fishing line…..to catch a prize fish or…
And the one that got away….the line breaks and the fish gets away

Verse
You with your hand on a fishing rod…..scene description
A cooler won't calm my fears….worms are kept in a cool place to stay alive longer
You have the heart of a tackle box…..fisherman is like hooks and lures…dangerous to the worm
If I had eyes they'd have tears….worm is not happy but can't express it to the fisherman

Bridge
If you find it quaint and not so disturbing….it's an interesting thought but beneath considering
If you can relate and find it reassuring…do animals believe in God and pray like people?
Children of a lesser god pray….saying yes animals know God, but God prioritizes human needs over animal needs
But that won't get in your way….humans don't need to worry about God's wrath regarding killing animals…..
Children of a lesser god pray
But that won't get in your way

Chorus
There's a high price for your happiness
And I'm paying for it today
There's a fine line between a trophy mount
And the one that got away
And I'm paying for it today….the worm is saying I am dying so you can fish
You're the one that got away….2 meanings the fisherman “got away from work” to go fishing….and….at the end of the afternoon, the fisherman will still be alive but the worm won't.
And I forget to say that I enjoyed the lyrics and the song too. :)
Thanks for the mention :wink:

James (also sometimes known as Charles too - it's my first name)


   
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Worms are not all helpless victims. :)
Remember that Martin Luther survived on a Diet of Worms


   
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Remember that Martin Luther survived on a Diet of Worms

:mrgreen: :lol:


   
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Worms are not all helpless victims. :)
Remember that Martin Luther survived on a Diet of Worms
....learning something new here all the time at SSG :wink:
......and after all his trials and death, Remember that worms survived on a diet of Martin Luther :P :roll:


   
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Very imaginative, James. I have to say that I've been having trouble with this exercise. Maybe because I've tried to be more specific in my lyrics it's hard to be purposely vague. You've done a good job and inspired me to try to get something posted today.

Renee


   
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Hi Renee,

Thanks for the listen and post :D

I had a chance to read your submission and MrEWorm's. You mentioned thinking you came up with the same idea as his.....I'm waiting for the revealing of your songs, because it's vague enough (which fits the assignment)....I can't figure them out :oops:

Kudos to you for persevering and getting a submission in :mrgreen:

James


   
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Instead of writing a song-a-week at the start of this year, I decided to go through my old songs and update some of them.

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Track 3

Spotify – Why God


   
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