Year 4 Wk 22 - Empress of Darkness

Well done! Reads great. Very descriptive. Any chance we might hear it put to music?

Hi Celt

This is the kind of thing I was really expecting from this assignment and well done for sticking with it. The song reads really well although the bridge feels awkward but if you have music in mind and it works that's OK.

Good stuff

Bob :twisted:

Thanks Guys

The music I have so far is fairly simple and I'm sure it
fits the mood of the piece. Then again that may be just
what the piece needs. Maybe I'll try recording it and see
how I feel after.

Glad to see you use my suggestion Bob I still have to
finish that "pachyderm" song though.

John

Well worth the wait, John. It's interesting how in reading all the posts this week, the sensuality of the vampire image seems to come through in everyone's songs. Almost like the ultimate submission.
I have to give you credit for tackling this subjsct twice within a short time frame. And a great job on both.

This is pretty neat, similar to the idea I had, but mine never materialized to anything beyong a verse and a half. It's well written, and produces the image of a sexy seductive female vampire. I'm tired of them being depicted as men.

My english class went to see a performance of Dracula, and there were these three beautiful women playing the vampire brides, your song reminds me of them.

Back on topic, the bridge seems ackward to be, but like it was said before, it you have a rhythm or music for it, then it's cool. I'd love to head it if you do record it.

Also, a bit off topic, I had to write an essay for the same english class on a theme from Dracula, and I chose to write on the sexual deviance involved. This song reminds me of that essay.

Good job, it's very descriptive. Great imagary, and a good flow!

My english class went to see a performance of Dracula, and there were these three beautiful women playing the vampire brides, your song reminds me of them.

EXACTLY :!:

Thanks

John

My english class went to see a performance of Dracula, and there were these three beautiful women playing the vampire brides, your song reminds me of them.

EXACTLY :!:

Thanks

John

It's impressive that you could paint such a visual image with this song. Like I said before, this is similar in style to the one I had, but your imagary is miles ahead!

Well done John, I think this one is “Celt Classic” it flows really well and tells a great story. I like the way the story is told from your point of view and leave us wondering just who you are, to be living with this temptress. What I think would be quite neat ( just my opinion of course cos the song is perfect as it is) would be 1 last line as an addition to the last chorus, maybe even spoken in a deflated way :
You're the Empress of Darkness
Queen of the Night
Seductress of men
Unaware of your bite
You thirst for the blood
Feel the pulse in their veins
Promise to love
And leave them in pain

Just like you promised me

Great song

Cheers

Paul

Great stuff. Everything you described reminded me not only of a vampire but of a succubus (a demon in the form of a woman that sucks the life out of men to stay alive.) Very vivid imagery. I can't give anymore compliments that haven't already been said, so I'll just say that I agree with everyones post.

Keep it up!

Hi John

Well done fits the assisgnment lovely ...

cheers
Hilch