If I Could Build...
If I could build a time machine
And return to my days with you
I would not change but a single thing
To make the sky more blue
And if I could build a rocket ship
To travel to Heaven's Gate
Could I spend one more day by your side
Or still would I have to wait
Why did you have to leave me so soon
I wasn't ready to let you go
And as I say my last good bye
There is something you need to know
If I could build the perfect bride
With hazel eyes and chestnut hair
She would not mean a thing to me
Because your heart would not be there
And if I could build my life again
It could never be the same
When I can not feel your sweet soft breath
Or hear you call my name
If I could build a time machine...
John
Hi John,
I understand the sentiment all too well and you've done a superb job exprssing it. Very nice.
Thank you.
Neil
hey John
I like this very nice paints great imagery
Music ? What do you have in mind ...?
I'm thinking maybe something different John some dirty distaughted chords ??
Hilch
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Darn, you stole my idea! I guess I should have wrote my song earlier. But, I think this topic belongs to you.
Keep it up!
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
Thank You All,
This was a rather fast write. I was waiting for my daughter to
stop by so I could help her with something and started to write
to kill time. After running out with her I came back and finished.
As far as music goes I haven't been able to come up with
anything yet. The problem seems to be is I'm hearing this as
a piano piece and I don't play piano.
Oh well :?
John
Hi John,
yes this is nice, but I can't let you off that easy :D .
If I could build a time machine
And return to my days with you
I would not change but a single thing
To make the sky more blue
For me this line is slightly out of context, You start talking about time and not changing things then all of a sudden we're talking about the sky, I know the point is, how can you change something thats perfect already, but I feel that that senitment can be expressed in a way that is more in context of the other three lines. Anyway just my opinion, this is a nice song
cheers
Paul
Man, I read this, and I could here this totaly done similiar to Planet P Projects stuff.
Tony Carey: http://www.truebeliever.de/ (also the keyboardist for Rainbow) had a great hit on MTV with the song "Why Me".
from Wikipedia: "Planet P Project was a science-fiction themed progressive rock band"
When I read the Time Machine aspect and then the "build a bride" angle, to me this was totaly Sci-Fi.
Hi Celt
Nice piece - really well written. Certainly along the lines of where I was expecting people to take the assignment.
As soon as you said piano I could hear it an Elton John kind of 'Your song' style.
Good stuff
Bob :wink:
You are what you eat, eat well
Wow,
A gerat deal of food for thought in all your comments.
Should I play up the Sci-Fi angle make some minor lyrical
changes I would not change a single thing
Or make the sky more blue or try to find a pianist
to be my Elton?(Hmm Rocket Man?)
Thank you all I may be able to make a song out of this yet.
John
