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 Celt
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Sometimes I am my own worst enemy.

I tried and tried to come up with something for this weeks
assignment and mostly fell flat. I had this idea for an epic
song about disillusion and lost love using the 60's as a backdrop
called "Summer Of Love". I got two verses that I did not find
to be very satisfying at all. Today I was play around with my
guitar and started strumming these two chords which brought
to mind the K.I.S.S. principle. (Keep It Simple Stupid)
A few minutes later I had a song that required only two chords
a five note lead and some simple heartfelt lyrics.

I found this a lot more satisfying than what I've been struggling
over all week. I hope you enjoy it.

Summer's End

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Why does summer end so early
Why does winter seem to last
How can we dream about our future
If we're living in the past

I know you love me Darling
But at times it's hard to see
How you ever came to marry
A lowdown guy like me

Why does summer end so early
Why does winter seem to last
How can we dream about our future
If we're living in the past

If we're living in the past

If we're living in the past

John

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(@chefie)
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Hey John,

Simple stupid yes . . . . . . . . but simple good, too. Really enjoyed the MP3. I think there are a few more lyrics you could add in time. Simple stuff that will come to you in time I'm sure.

Good work!

Neil


   
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(@davidhodge)
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Simply gorgeous!

I agree with Neil that you could use one more verse - I'd suggest after the solo and before the repeat of the first verse. Maybe something to turn the whole thing around. The first verse seems to want to set up a sad song but the second verse suggests otherwise. Maybe something to confirm the positive aspects?

Nicely done and arranged and looking forward to more.

Peace


   
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(@jameswigan)
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I liked it. ;)


   
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(@embrace_the_darkness)
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Hey John

Nice song! Keeping it simple really worked for you this week. I actually disagree with Neil, I don't think you should add any more lyrics to it, it works great the way it is.

Pete

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 Celt
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Thanks Guys,

I don't know lately I've been attracted to the 2 minute format
I may come up with something else for this but for right now
I'm inclined to agree with Pete.

Sooner or later though I will probably write an epic piece

John

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(@vic-lewis-vl)
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Short and sweet John!

I love the main riff - the fingerpicking guitar. Only fault I can find is that (to my ears) the 2nd guitar - the one that's playing the melody line and the solo - sounds a touch flat. Just a tiny touch - and the timing is also a TINY bit off. Other than that, you've got another really good song.

First impressions - I'll have another listen in the AM. For now....I like it.

:D :D :D

Vic

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 Celt
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Thanks Vic,

I probably should do a better recording of this one.
I was pretty much recording it as I was writing and
I don't think I checked my tuning before hand just
grabbed the guitar that was next to my computer.

John

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(@raystrack)
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I like it, especially the lines about dreaming of the future while living in the past. I was singing harmony from the second verse on - absolutely ripe for it.

For me though I have to say I get bored easily and I cannot subscribe to the view you can have a song with just two chords - at some point you have to break out.

Well worth working on. :D

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 Bob
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Hi John

This is very JJ Cale like, kind of reminds me of a song of his called Magnolia - very smple in structure and with the same vocal style.

Really good stuff - glad to see you're writing again keep 'em coming.

Bob :wink:

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(@rocketgirl)
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Hi John!

I really like your song. I've listened to it a few times and I like the length.

I have to say I noticed your voice first thing, it seems to have changed a bit since I've heard you last. Sounds more full and relaxed...good job! Gwynne.


   
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 Celt
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Thanks Bob and Gwynne

And Bob I will be adding Magnolia to my set list.

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