I was just reading David's response in the "Tried and True" discussion
where he stared:
Then things started getting back into the "norm," and I found myself not submitting things that were perfectly imperfectly fine but not "keepers." It shouldn't be so easy to forget how much you have to write to come up with something that works - all I have to do is look at any of the hundreds of songs I never play and haven't since I've written them.
So I'm late posting this "perfectly imperfectly fine" piece I wrote for the Week 2 assignment.
Thanks for the guilt trip, David.
John
What Are We To Do
Gasses from our factories
Poisoning our skies
Until there's nothing for our children
But to watch the planet die
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
Polar caps are melting
Oceans levels rise
And who will feed our hungery souls
When our farmlands have gone dry
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
If the truth is inconvenient
Do we need another lie
As we keep emitting CO2
With every mile we drive
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
What are we to do
This seemed good to me then it stopped!
So the imperfection, I would suggest, is that it is a bit short. Sort of states the problem and asks the question then stops.
It gave me a bit of a helpless feeling, so pehaps you could lengthen it by putting in an answer to the chorus question.
what are we to do?
Lets all ride bicycles
Everyone plant a tree
Recycle your bottles
& behave sustain-ablee
well - you know what I mean :D
ola
“Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is go where they can find you.” - Winnie the Pooh