Year 7 Wk 13 My Baby's Gone/MP3 Updated

I'm going to praise this song this way . . .
This is the type of song I would like to be able to create . . .
mournfully melodic,
pretty melody that's easily memorable (in fact I'd like to sing this myself),
apparently minimal guitar since it's only one chord (yet I'm not yet capable of doing)

The only line that didn't go down as smoothly is

. . . put a little money away

Not because it didn't sing well . . .
because (I felt) another reason involving the kids should be brought up again . . . for not sleeping.

But then again . . . putting money away (for a rainy day) is probably for the kids . . . so disregard that.

So, ummh . . . I guess, darn it, it's perfect as is.

KR2

I'm Back!

Well it's about time!
My apologies for going missing for so long but real life gets in the way sometimes.

Yeah, it does, doesn't it - OK, so no apologies needed. Flit in and out as you please - you know there'll always be a warm welcome here for you. We'll save you a chair, pour you a drink - though it may go flat! - and save some food from the buffet....

As for the song - well, you didn't quite make it all the way through the verse, but that's OK - one of the examples I quoted was "Paperback Writer," McCartney NEARLY made it all the way through the verse on one chord.....I think we can forgive one beat out of thirty-two.

As for the MP3? Sounds fine to me - same old voice, not QUITE as bluesy as in the old days (last year?) but the feeling's still there...sounds like you've been doing a bit of double-tracking, and a little echo? or delay? Whatever, it's sounding good - and.....

Good to have you back, John! Drop in as and when you can - it's nice to have a few new faces around here (and boy, aren't they GOOD?) but it's also nice to see some of the old faces have still got the old magic......

:D :D :D

Vic

Hi Vic, Edit: I mean Celt :!: :oops:

Nice song. Your guitar sounds a bit out of tune.

I like the doubled vocals. Cool. Maybe pull the secondary vocal way back in the mix and pan it.

I think you could consolidate some lyrics. For instance:

Don't know I'm gonna work each day
Pay the bills put a little money away

Could be:

Don't know I'm gonna work each day
Pay the bills put some money away

To me it flows better and sound a little more rural. I'm not sure if you want to sound more rural. :)

Ernie

Nice!!

I was wondering, are you using two guitars here? It almost sounds like two guitars playing the same thing just like a split second apart.

John,

I enjoyed the listen. :note2: The lyrics look good, too...easy to follow but still open to the listener to fill in why "baby is gone".

Suggestion:
It's more personal preference, but the hook came in a bit too soon for me. I would have preferred the first to verses together first then the hook/chorus.

Nice Song! :D It's still floating around my head after one listen and reading through the other posts.

James

Thanks Guys

Your comments made me take a second look at this. The doubled vocals came as a bit of a fluke.
I recorded the vocals dry and felt they needed some reverb. The second track became the first
and the first got edited as backing.The guitar was recorded with chorus effect the same guitar
recorded twice.This may have been been a bit much so I've toned down the effect and taken a
different approach to the second guitar and mixing. I've change the "a little money" to "some money",
which really does seem to work better, made a new MP3 and updated Sound Click.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7288056

Thanks again

John

It's good John. Not sure what you would do with this but I like the sparseness of it and that is causing me to have second thoughts about doubled vocals through most of the song. Seems like guitar slide and voice are all thats needed because it is sad and lonely. I could see the backing vocals done with a female singer. Oh maybe someone like Emmylou Harris. :D
But those are just my prefs. Thanks for working on it.

Ernie

I could see the backing vocals done with a female singer. Oh maybe someone like Emmylou Harris. :D
But those are just my prefs.
+1

Thanks KR and Ernie,
I could see the backing vocals done with a female singer. Oh maybe someone like Emmylou Harris. :D
But those are just my prefs.
+1
That would work fine by me

If either of you know how to get in touch with Emmy Lou
tell her I'd love to work with her on this. :lol:

A more likely choice might be Kathy Reichert.

John

I have to admit, that when I listened earlier, the though came to mind! :P Great Song John. I love the simplicity of the song as a whole.
Now if I could just come up with a song.... any song, I'd be thrilled!

Liked the first MP3....LOVED the second one. In this case, less is definitely more. It has the instantly familiar feeling of a song I've known for years, but the freshness of this week's writing.

So a duet's a possibility, then? Even better!

:D :D :D

Vic