Yera 4 Wk 28 Someone's Listening

Hey John, that's a great song you've got there!

I really love the concept of a song about a song. Particular one that confirms our (ie. listeners) suspicions about the truth in songs. I often find myself wondering, when listening to a song, whether the singer is singing truths about themselves or just singing fiction. :)

So what sort of style did you have in mind for the music?

Hi Mr Celt

This is rather nice I'm thinking Guitar picking Am , D , G or something simple along those lines ..

The only part I might tinker with is the word "stupid " ... To me it was a a tiny little bit to get my tongue around , maybe replace it with " little "but then you lose the meaning of that line ....

Any way I'll make my mind up on this if you record it , as usual little things like that usually do sound alot better when sung by a talented person like your self

I like this my freind

Best

L.K

Hey John

I am just going to agree and say this is great ,

I have one question though , Is the repeativness of the word someone is that intentional ?

I'm not saying I don't like it , I'm just curious ...

Hilch :?:

Awsome song dude, I love the switching context of past and present, not allways a smooth thing to do, but you pull it off completely!

Dunno if you have music for it already, I agree with lotto king with;

"picking Am , D , G or something simple along those lines .." but perhaps then switching to gentle strumming for the choruses?

Nice work, keep it up! :)

now where'd my guitar go?.............

Pete

Thanks Guys

The funny thing about the "truth" of this song
is that it is total fiction but as always I hope the
emotions ring true. The repetitive "Someones"
did not start off as intentional but sort of grew
that way. I wrote the chorus first and by the third
line I had to go with it.

I think Pete and LK(Welcome Back Again Buddy)
are on to something with the musical suggestions.
I was working on a G-D-C-G thing but the Am works
much better.
I'll try to record it but work and home life are very
busy right now so no promises

OK I think that answers all your comments.

No. Wait a minute.

The stupid line works well for me although there
is a good chance it may become "stupid little"or
"little stupid" in the final edit.

Thank Again,

John

Hell, John, you really do know how to tug on the heartstrings!

I love the concept behind this....the feeling that the whole world could be listening in to someone's life set to music - that's karma!

i think the repeated "someone's" work - kind of give the song an ambiguous tone - is the someone anyone, or is it the narrator?

Works for me anyway!

:D :D :D

Vic

Thanks Vic,

The concept for this was lifted from the
70's disco hit by Donna Summers "On The Radio"
which is about hearing your own life story on the air.

I though the "Someone" was the narrator but
after rereading I'm not too sure. I'm thinking
of adding another half chorus at the end but
I'm not sure if that would clear up the ambiguity
or not.

Anyways it goes like this.

Someone's listening to the radio
Someone's hearing your song
Someone's crying at every word you sing
Remembering how he's done wrong

Still a little ambiguous?

John

The way I was looking at it was....

left alone, there's always that vague ambiguity....the listener/reader will ALWAYS be left slightly in suspense, he/she will always be intrigued by the song - "Is he writing about himself or about anyone?"

The new lines are good, but you lose that little air of mystique - the listener thinks "oh it's about himself - she's singing about HIM!" - and might be taken aback the first time, but the element of surprise has gone next listen......

That's only one opinion, others may feel differently - I like the ambiguity.....

:D :D :D

Vic

Yeah Vic,

I agree with you and like the ambiguity and think
I'll leave well enough alone.

Thanks

John

I totally agree with Vic on this one. I prefer the first version primarily for that ambiguity. :)

Great work, John. The pacing of the story is fantastic, ie. the way you reveal the subject to the listener. Wish I had more to nit-pick.