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(@katreich)
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OK, in full disclosure I must admit that I watched the documentary "Six on Sondheim",not once, but twice in the last couple of weeks! What a genius. I am quite sure that this rhyme scheme and cadence came straight from Stephen,but do not apologize. It was a fun exercise. And as the maestro said in the film "If I wake up humming "one enchanted evening", I immediately go and look at the music I wrote the night before, to make sure I didn't write as Oscar Hammerstein."

Whatever

Whatever truths you think you know
Whatever lies you tell
Whatever lives lived long ago
I've lived them all as well

Whatever words I think out loud
Whatever things I do
Whatever songs played for a crowd
It's your soul shining through.

whatever else you hear, don't believe it
who's ever telling all those tales
misconceived it.

Whatever else you think of me
Whatever you opine
Whatever chance I have will be
A chance to make you mine.

Whatever doors may open wide
Whatever move I make
Whatever confusion I've implied
Please make no mistake

Forget about whatever else you decided
And assure me that this love's
not misguided.

Whatever truths you think you know
Whatever lies you tell
Whatever lives lived long ago
I've lived them all as well.

Whatever words I think out loud
Whatever things I do
Whatever songs played for a crowd
It's your soul shining through.

KReichert
12/30/13

Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.

www.soundclick.com/kathyreichert


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(@davidhodge)
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Hi Kathy

Very nice. And I can definitely hear this as a bit of a jazz-lounge style number. Maybe we'll get Jose to channel his best Frank for you?

Two thoughts:

The last line in the second stanza, while probably one of the most important lines in the whole song, comes across a bit clunky. Not sure this is the best fix, but how about:

Whatever words I think out loud
Whatever things I do
Whatever song I play for a crowd
Their soul (s?) come straight from you

Secondly, this stanza is so important I think you should tack it on to the ending as well. Yes it makes the song a little longer, but I think using both of the first two stanzas as bookends makes a very strong impression.

Looking forward to this hearing this at some point. Break out your diminished chord dictionary!

Peace


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(@katreich)
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How about:

Whatever songs I play for a crowd

The songs belong to you
or
Whatever songs I play for a crowd
I'm singing just for you
or
The words are just for you
or
It's your soul that shines through?????

Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.

www.soundclick.com/kathyreichert


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(@davidhodge)
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Like the last line a lot. How about making it active?

It's your soul shining through...

Total aside, but thanks to your wonderfully snarky comment on my assignment post it's taken pretty much all my moral strength to not reply to every song this week with a single word...

Peace


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(@andygetch)
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Yes very catchy! I like the flip on the meaning of "Whatever" into a love song (as opposed to the snarky comment)

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1228093


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(@john-sargent)
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Nicely written and I like the changes that others suggested. Will you post a recording of this?


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(@katreich)
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I have very distinct music in my head for this, ( again, probably a direct rip-off of a Sondheim number), but it's orchestral, and very much above my abilities as a guitarist,or musician in general for that matter. I'm going to play around on the keyboard today just to see if I can get something bare bones to post, but I'm certainly not making any promises.

Well that's one way to make hours fly by! Here's the sounclick link:
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12626241
A bit rough, and the orchestration on the keyboard is cheesy, but you get the general idea.

Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.

www.soundclick.com/kathyreichert


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(@jamestoffee)
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Yes very catchy! I like the flip on the meaning of "Whatever" into a love song (as opposed to the snarky comment)
+1

Nice job! :D


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(@barnabus-rox)
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Hi Kathy -
WOW I got to hear you sing , that is the 1 st time I think I have ever heard you sing - I might be wrong but I am sure I would have remembered THAT voice !

I don't have a lot to offer you on this except - It's darn GOOD !
Loved it Loved it Loved it - The wife thought I was playing Amy Grant C D .. Silly girl huh LOL

Well done bravo on the writing / Playing and singing :)

Trev.. :D :D

Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am


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