Light It Up
Well hes cleaning up the mess upon the city streets
But the mess now in his life is one mess he cannot clean
Behind all the tin cans and all of the rubbish piles
Is one thing that keeps him going, a strangers glowing smile
So blow the dust of your heart
And you will see the sun
Theres so much left for you
Your life has just begun
Well hes covered in battles scars and bathed in the dirt
Cleaning up grafitied walls and writing broken words
There was never enough time in his lonely life to see
Whats beneath all the mess down on the city streets
So blow the dust of your heart
And you will see the sun
Theres so much left for you
Your life has just begun
Pull back the blanket
Of this stary sky
Fly through the ribbons
Of this beautiful life
So blow the dust of your heart
And you will see the sun
Theres so much left for you
Your life has just begun
Rain Shadow
wow! this is excellent and really moving too! it fits the assignment perfectly and i love it! Pat on the back for that mate ;)
I like it, do you have any chords in mind to go with it?
This is indeed, excellent. I think this is also the most positve work anyone will put up this week, but it still very nicely fits in with the topic.
Only thing that bothered me was using the word mess three times in two lines... i would try and cut that down to one...
Well hes cleaning up the mess upon the city streets
But there's one in his life that he cannot clean
something like that. everything else is spot on.
good writing,
sozay
currently number 60 in total posts... and shooting for number 1!!
Hi'a Lost beginning
like this especially
So blow the dust of your heart
And you will see the sun
Theres so much left for you
Your life has just begun
I am a bit confused by the two long verses though ,the shorter ones flow really well, but I don't get that feeling with the longer ones.
Go wel
Ja'mir
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