Hi Mr Blue EyesCelt's advice about the Hunt line is worth taking.Chris is right in saying songs don't need to rhyme but they do need to be consistent....
Hi RaySimply excellent lyrics on a strong theme -very well done.Musically I could make it fit with some minor chords for the verses and major for for ...
Hi NeilOnce again bang on for the assignment. This is very good. There's some killer lines in there but my favourite isand when I tell you I love yo...
Hi PearlThis is pretty good. I agree with Celt that more could be added but what you've got is pretty good. I hear it kind of spoken, Robbie Roberts...
Hi ChrisThis did make me laugh when I read it through. However, I did read it through a lot quicker than the MP3 sounded, as with most people I had t...
Hi CorlenyaPut me down for an a capella version also. Although I think something in there to keep the beat would be good as John suggests. The back ...
Hi RayThis is just superb - great song for this assignment and a really well done MP3. Loved itBob :wink:
Hi ChrisJust excellent - so enjoyable, so easy to relate to and so cleverly written. You've done the hard part and that's to get your first song done...
Hi StraycatI think this is one of the best songs you've put up here. It contains your usual rich imagery but combines it with a kind of situation eas...
Hi JohnThis is a lovely piece, with a real heartfelt sentiment sticking out strongly. I understand you with the novelist analogy as it's what I tend ...
Ni NeilGreat work - made me smile a lot on the read through and then listening to the MP3 just made it better.Great stuffBob :wink:
Hi CorlenyaA very good first posting - I think David's points about cliches is spot on, they don't seem as obvious here you've worked it in well. Goo...
Hi Greatwhitneorthwelcome to SSG - glad you stopped by.Interesting take on the assignment but seems a bit too specific. Could there be an option to l...