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Christiaan
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Joined: Dec 25, 2003
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Re: Y8W12 - Butterfly Road

Hey James,Thanks for the listen. The chorus and the melody were written a few weeks back and this is the third set of lyrics I've written for it. I wa...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W12 Phoenix

Hey James,Been listening to this one a few times this week, but I must say I liked the first draft better, I'm not sure why you added all the violent ...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8week13 four thirds surprised

It's really amazing how well this works with all the fractions strewn throughout the song.And there's another one of your great images in this song:i ...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W9 - Missed Opportunity

Hey Martin,Looking very good! These are the first lyrics of yours I've read, but I can tell you like to write.Great opening lines, it immediately esta...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W11 - Airport Man

Hey Martin,I must admit, I don't know quite what to make of this song... on the recording, your guitar playing and tone of voice sounds so serious, bu...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W13 Lottery

This is so much better now! The verses now do at good job at pulling me into the story. You've sacrificed a lot of the complexity you originally inten...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W13 Lottery

Well, my comments wouldn't mean a thing if I weren't honest, so here goes: I don't think this song is working this way.I think the main problem is tha...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8week12 our summer

Great lyrics! When I was a kid we always had one week holiday in autumn, and when we were lucky we'd get one day with good weather. This song feels li...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W12 Phoenix

This is something I like a lot. I'm sure I've heard R.E.M. play this once :wink: I agree with straycat that "Smoke the days like cigarettes" is a very...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W11 - Airport Man

Thanks for the positive comments (been having a lot of other stuff on my mind, sorry for not replying sooner :oops: )Glad you liked the humour, stray...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8W11 Rain

Hey James,Very nice song! Thanks for that explanation too, it's very interesting, I already thought you must have come up with the guitar part first, ...

14 years ago
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Re: Y8 Week 11 - Your Not Around

I keep imagining a little boy waiting for his mother to return from shopping, in the first four verses anyway.Some nice imagery here - I quite like "T...

14 years ago
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Re: YR 8 Wk 11 The Winter of My Discontent

Hey,Very strong lyrics. Especially the third verse (which looks like it's a bridge) is a flawless piece of writing, very strong.I know it's tricky to ...

14 years ago
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