lots to work with here. but i agree with the others in that it's a bit vague and here's why I think that is. change the song back to first person. I i...

welcome to guitar noise. it's a great place. and now for a little advice. Keep your age to yourself. I don't mean to be patronizing or paternal but it...

love it except for the line that at her beauty you weptit's extraneous and forced. the rest is way cool.as thoreau saidsimplify, simplify, simplify.ch...

nice sentiment but too wordyhere's my take on your first verse. does it flow any better for you? Fewer words should let you ballad the hell out of thi...

hi NickI guess to clarify. My original post dealt with the basic question of self-censorship or to put it another way do you choose the song or does t...

vicbut everything IS politics. as artists or wannabe artists our job is to be the messengers ... to be the critics. When that sinks in it informs our ...

citizenI agree but in the sixties and I remember a bit (was still a kid) the biggest fear (what else is new) was whether the russians would come over ...

wow ... here's an american with Dylan sized balls and one of my heros. If you haven't heard James then check out "we can't make it here anymore" wha...

thanks everyone for the prompt reply. I'll get a small amp with a headphone out. seems so obvious now. thanks again.

i didn't even notice the missing line. you're absolutely right, it's much better with the extra line. guess that's why we post here.thanksgram99

mornings for me. words and phrases come in droves until the critic wakes up and tells me that what i've written is crap. I tell him to fuck off, grab ...