Hi all, thanks for the comments.I meant recall as in memories, so I changed the line to "Promises we can't recall". Still has the double meaning which...

Fantastic imagery, it's like we're in a film. And the Oscar for location, casting, dialogue, costumes, props, and writing, goes to.... wilhelmina!

I think it's one of those ones I really need to hear to come to grips with the words.I do like the "through X I gain Y..." part though.

Hi James,I wasn't sure about naming him Cole actually. At first it was Mr Tibbs. Any name would do but as you noticed I ended up with one that sounds ...

I love it! You told a classic story in a very expressive way thanks to the repetition of words and syllables. A very valid response to the topic IMO.T...

It sounds quite poetic and pleasing... I like the imagery. Add a few more verses and it would seem to me more like a full song rather than a promising...

Very much enjoyed the read and especially your amusing list of unlikely tasks which needed completing by the AFB members!

It's a good story; I tend to agree with James about the phrasing of certain lines sounding a little... weird. Particularly the end of the lines.Here a...

This reads super nicely and the fire metaphor makes it very poetic. Jay, this is the kind of song that inspires me to write!Lying in bed this morning ...

A really good simple story with nice clear imagery.The only feedback I can think of at the moment is that the line "I value that time we spent togethe...

Far out! In general I like the track, although there are a couple of points where the use of non-English words might be considered a little overboard....

John,this looks like a seriously polished piece! Another one of your best.Keep up the good writing.

Cool concept for a song, and some of the writing is really direct and concise. Awesome job.I particularly like the opening couplet:The day I was born,...