Heh yeah I noticed that myself after I posted it. I just copied it straight from my notebook, forgetting that I wrote the whole thing in 20 minutes wh...

That is an absolutely brilliant song. Very expressive.Well done!Dillon

I'm still working with the band on putting it to music, but if we record it I'll be sure to post it :)Glad you like it,Dillon

thanks lk, that's a good idea. That's really what I was looking for, a way to wrap it up. The repeated mother brother line makes it sound like the cha...

Very nice.I can't decide if it's literally a song about toy soldiers tangling with a cat, or if that's a symbol for something like the Iraq war. What ...

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definitely deeper. i personally use 12s on my electrics and love the feel and the sound.

Interesting thread, I've gained a whole new appreciation for lyricists I hadn't paid much attention to before.I love the lyrics of Johnny Cash, Dylan,...

Umm... well you could trim a couple of words and see if that helps, like "Meant to ask if this time I could stay, but spoke a little late" will free y...

Wow that's beautiful. The last verse gave me chills.The meter in it seems a little strange though, like there are more words than there need to be. Th...

Oh yeah, and feel free to critique any other aspect of the song as well. I just wanna learn :)