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Re: SSG12 - Week43 - I'm not lost - mp3 added

I found some time this morning while everyone else was away, so here's the mp3."...remember you wanted this" - Jack Reacher :lol:

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Re: SSG12 - Week43 - I'm not lost

Thanks John and David for the comments, The second line could use a bit of a tweak, even if it's just a switch from "those" to "your." And, depending ...

10 years ago
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Re: SSG12 - Week43 - I'm not lost

Yes, now let's have a listen :note2: Plenty of time in the week :wink: We'll see

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Re: Y12W43 Lost and Found

Maybe something like this, its not quite right but closeHis selfless giving his innocent lifeGives hope for humanity through sacrifice just turning it...

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Re: Y12W43 Lost and Found

Hi James,nice work here, the story progresses well and you choice of music fits. The only thing that piques me are these 2 lines:An innocent man made ...

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Re: SSG12 - Week43 - I'm not lost

Thanks for the comments James,I guess chronologically v1 & v2 needed to be swapped. My original intention was v1 sets the scene, v2 cuts back to t...

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Re: Y12W41 Paradise Motel

Hi James,I think Johns suggestion and the way you phrased it was brilliant, for me the that's the standout of this song. I thought it might be just a...

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Re: Y12W41 Dad's otel

Hi Neil,I love it well done :D Paul

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Re: Y12W38 Did He Mention?

Hi James I think the cliche works perfectly in the context of the situation. Sounds like the kind of line this guy would likely come out with.Good wor...

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Re: SSG12 - Week19 - Talk to me

Thanks James,So let's hear that picking! :wink: yes that's this weekends project, Im still learning so it wont be that great :oops: cheersPaul

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Re: Y12W19 Start Again

Hi James,I can definitely hear this song on the radio well done. Its got a sophistication that really appeals to me. I must admit though I can hear t...

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