The the italics and brief history helped loads, the brilliance of the song would have been completely lost on me with out them. The extra verses also ...

thats an awesome track, i liked it so much i checked out your website and other mp3s. all good stuff. let us know if u ever gig in the uk ;)

nice imagery,only criticism is the lack of structure, but if you've already written the music i guess that that is intentional.did u mean 'waisted' to...

hi blue,a definate improvement on the old version but i think still a bit rough round the edges.i like the therapist / patient thing.i like the jet li...

hithanks for you comments,blue the typo on alcohol was deliberate, i periodically change vowel sounds of words at teh end of lines to help the rhymes,...

took me a while to twig, the hot august night and diamond reference, but i got there.nice touch with the generational aspect as well.my only concern i...

not much to add really, just posting to 2nd vic and say i really liked the 'The small talk was miniscule' line.rob:)

nothing to add really, the balence of the song, content and structure are just right.great workrob:)

nice take on the task, and so incredibly true!!highlights for me were:comatose bodies in various states of undressandAnd I hate the fact I'm having so...

hi,cheap wine seemd quite awkward to me, particularly the first verse which is more like a series of statements than a sustained description,also the ...

lol, took me a while to figure out where the acronyms came in, took me a while to figure out exactly what was going on as well, but i'm glad i did. ve...

hey, when the songs going that well why feel u need to stop!theres one thing i'm uncomfortable about however, the line 'Play me a song for the man wit...