Wonderful! I love the sentiment behind this and it is so well-executed.The only thing that I could comment on is that this line caught me for length...

Thanks for the response and the feedback, chefie. I put myself in the shoes of someone I don't know and imagined her psyche and motivations. Not sure...

Love the idea behind this one. I think everyone unknowingly depends on those few odd people just to be there, even if they don't play any significant...

I love these lines:Where I lay for a number of nights Recording the shifts in the shades of light Beneath my dead-beat body Fairy tales in holes of wo...

Nice work! The hearse verse is wonderful and struck me right away. The rest are strong as well. I'm not sure what I'd change.

Vic, I like this one enough to start noodling with some music to it. My life's crazy go nuts busy right now, but it's definitely on the list.Lavadave...

I think this conveys a single emotion very well. My initial impression is to diversify the verses somewhat to give it a bit more depth. Show a way y...

I like how the lyrics have their own rhythm to them. Well done! My only suggestion is that the "From the dancing I'll do at my brand new scene" line...

Thanks for the feedback, y'all. :)Scratch, I agree with you about the last verse. Now that you've pointed it out, I can see its a big part of what I'...

I like the idea behind this one. Malls at Christmas time often seems surreal to me as well. And the pattern is kinda Seuss-ish, which adds well to t...

I like! It hangs together well and makes a solid and unified statement. My favorite line is "There is no casino nor even a chip". Heh heh.I suggest ...