i wrote a song like this before but i didn't like mine.i don't have any suggestions but let me remind youCARTOONS rhymes with BALLOONS!!!!that was the...

yeah.. the "how could you?" i liked. i didn't see it as angry i saw it as a lazy anger. like showing anger when you don't really mean it.. you just fe...

all i meant wasyou're lonely, bitter, unhappy and then you find love and happiness cuz finally found something that actually means something to you."t...

kinda reminds me of "thirteen" by Big Star.. also known as one of the greatest songs ever written...come on people!! pop music is GREAT!!!! when you n...

i hate to sound like i'm defending myself cuz i appriciate everyones thoughts.. but as for "another teenager protest song"... i dunno.. that's almost ...

once again.. don't listen to me.. but maybe you should try some free verse. i guess maybe it won't fit into your song... but it's helpfull to get a bu...

umm.. the chorus had better be the greatest pop melody in the world cuz you sing it 5 times. maybe you could combine 2 verses and make it not so predi...

well at the end he kills himself. and you go to hell for suicide. and christianity is based on fear. believe or go to hell. do good or go to hell.. do...

yeah .. read that cuz it's good. but dont pay attention to "7. If you have to explain a line to me, you need to re-write it."remember to write for YOU...

YYYEEESSSS !!!!! BEST ENDING EVER!!!!

you should just steal and rework what marv. said for your chorus.. cuz funny enough it sorta flows and rhymes..describe a dream without mentioning its...