Verse 1
Your problems are too much
Make me blush
Please dont tell me the rest,
Your words are filled with lead
I need my meds
Or ill slap you upside the head
I cant take any more
Youre such a bore
Im tired of your one track mind
And how you're blind
to that no one gives a crap
You need to quit the whining
and pining
over what you can not have
if you dont make the change
i think i will
i think ill kill
one of your dozen cats
Chorus
You need to change
re-arrange
those screwed up ideas of yours
give your old self the shoe
Put someone before you
Change your whole concept
of how to live
Youve got all the wrong precepts
You need to make someone new
out of the old you
Verse 2
You cant stop ringing my bell
what the hell?
you know theres consequences
like broken fences
over the back of your thigh
youve gone awry
well the fault is all on you
Chorus
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theres some errs and stuff that need ironing out but i like it.
Its sung kinda stuttery with pauses in places that you wouldnt think there should be. I really like the idea..
Gimme feedback or give me death*.
*feed back preferred
aka Izabella
Gimme feedback or give me death*.
*feed back preferredThen feedback it shall be!
I read this through and thought it was OK, but then read your note about the music at the bottom. I went back and read it again with that in mind and now I really like it! It has a really persistent rhythm to it, which is cool.
You need to make someone new
out of the old you - cool line.
As you say, it needs some ironing out - I expect that will simply happen over time as you play it.
Well written.
G
Listen Louder Than You Play
I Like it. It sounds like a good song. I especially like like the line"i think i will,i think ill kill,one of your dozen cats. To mean it means you're killing on of his lives, I think's it's a great line.
