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(@e-sherman)
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What do you think, eh? I cant seem to write a good bridge.

Suspension
Has carried you
Redemption
Has seen you through

To an early morning, bright afternoon
And a thought may filter past
Your broken loveless cast
A cast is just a cast away at sea

Chorus
Now your falling away from me
Falling away from me
Falling away and Can't you see, you got to go so I can leave

Direction
Which way to go
Defection
Could you ever know

That I was thinking of you, that I was breathing of you
A thought may filter past
I'm going much too fast
A broken mast is just a sailor lost at sea

The king of rock, some say lives
the lizard king, is surely dead
the king of France, lost his head
the King of Kings... bled
( email me at esherman@wideopenwest.(com). I almost never check my hotmailaccount.


   
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(@good)
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I don't know, I liked it, but I had a go at changing some things.

To an early morning, bright afternoon
And this thought comes filtering past
You're between the sky and harvest moon
I wish you'd never return

That I was thinking of you, that I was breathing of you
and this thought comes filtering past
This can't go on, we can never work through
I wish you'd never return

Heck. Yours is probably better, but I'm just aiming to contribute more. Good work.

We're like The Beatles, except there's four of us.


   
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