Ok this song really needs some work and any advice or tips that you have are GREATLY appreciated :D
(Verse 1)
Tears may dry
But scars remain
Reminding us of yesturday
Feeling lost, feeling betrayed
I think it's time for things to change
(Chorus)
Everything I've gave
I only lost more
Every time I tried
I fell flat on the floor
(Verse 2)
You didn't even notice
You never really cared
All the timesI bled
All the tears I shed
You said that you would have my back
But you never lended me a helping hand
(Verse 1)
Tears may dry
But scars remain
Reminding us of yesterday
Feeling lost, feeling betrayed
I think it's time for things to change
(Chorus)
Everything I've gave
I only lost more
Every time I tried
I fell flat on the floor
(Verse 2)
You didn't even notice
You never really cared
All the timesI bled
All the tears I shed
You said that you would have me back
But you never lent me a helping hand
suggested bridge
The way has to be forward
but I face the path alone
the one we walked together
'til that last fork in the road
I just can't face another step
my heart heavy as a stone
drags me down, down til I'm
flat on the floor (/ ground)
I'd be inclined to turn the chorus into a verse and have something with a bit of hope as the chorus.
Good luck anyway
Hey I like that bridge a lot and I've thought about using this as a chorus instead. Let me know what you think.
Somehow I'll find the strength to stand
I don't need your helping hand
I'll walk down this road I chose
Standing tall, I'll stand alone
I've altered my effort to scan better
The know the way is forward
but I face the path alone
the one we walked together
'til that last fork in the road
I just can't face another step
heart heavy as a stone
dragging me down, down
Someday I'll find the strength to stand
without your helping hand
I'll walk down this road we chose
Standing tall, but walking alone
I prefer the feel of sorrow at the loss of a loved partner to a bitter put-down
Yeah thank you I would have to agree :D
