The voice on the other line
is coming through
nothing but a whisper
The voice inside my head
is screaming outloud
how much that I miss her
And my body starts to shake
as my walls come
crumbeling down
And the stones that
made my walls
fall to the ground
And if I was lucky
I could close my eyes
I'd could sleep forever
never notice the tears in my eyes
It took something like this
to erase all doubt
and make her remember the way
that she felt
Then the confirmation tears
through my heart
like a jagged knife
Everything I thought I had
turned against me
and drained my life
And as I lay here in
The rubble of My life
Cold and naked
The rain that is you
starts to fall
and wash the pain away
If I was lucky
I could close my eyes
and wake up next to you
For all time
And so with you as
my foundation
I rebuild
And start anew
You are the force that
brought my world down
And you are the stone that
I will rebuild upon
And if I stay lucky
everything will be fine
we will build a life together
all we need is time
There is not enough years
In a life time
For me to be with you
For you to be mine
If I stay lucky
Only time will tell
Only you can understand
just how hard I fell...
Quite the story behind this song. instead of explaining it to everyone, ill jsut let everyone post how it reflects onto them. Also any Critiques and Comments are greatly appretiated as always.
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no one read my songs anymore? :(
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could really use some feedback....
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I think this is a good song, i like the way it flowed, what kind of music do you play with it?
orange armada
It's not that we don't like your song your song is fine
I have no comments to offer to you other than "good job"
take care
mystic
i play it acoustic, in a real dark powerful style of play. Think the band "The Spill Canvas"
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hey orange armanda dude
that's a dr8 effort
wonder when i'll start writin like this
only thing , it sounds a bit to me like " good poetry " ... i cant c a definitive musical progresion that would satisfy it
most paras hv different ending's so i'm assumin there's no chorus ..
it's bloody good poetry though ..
hope u dnt get upset or anything
jus ma 2 cents
tc
well the "if I was lucky" verses are supposed to serve as the chorus, it justs progresses as the song goes on :)
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