A good choice of material, and it'd be nice to hear the whole thing. I presume you've got the theme nailed.
One point though; at the end of the A section you've moved into the dominant - the last bar of the A section spells out the tonic chord of the new key, and the B section opens in the new key. My score has D# in the 2nd beat of bars 2 and 4 of the B section (leading note for the key of E major, the dominant for A major in which my score is written) and you didn't play it that way so the notes sounded decidedly flat.
Do check your score.
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