Hi
here it goes
"
Sleeping days
Dust upon my face
sleeping days
oppressive lazyness
Why can't I
just fly away
vaporize the clay
and soar away
daytime sleep
a sheep more or less
daytime sleeps
a point beyond my reach
Why can't I
just fly away
vaporize the clay
and soar away
"
(c) Morten Karlsson 2006
It would be great to get some feed back (both negative or positive), or proposals to improvement.
hej morten, i loved denmark when i visited, cool place, i think that your song could definately be longer, but you have a good chorus to work around though i would suggest you might want to use and soar today as opposed to repeating away, try to work out a couple more verses, maybe, a noontime nap, to beat the heat, a nootime nap, sucking the tv's teet, sorry bout that, couldn't resist, and i'm not sure if i'm on the path you started with your song, but keep writing.
marty
sytys
