Song a Week 46
First Name has 5 letters - used only 4 chords for this one. Em - C2 - D - G (capo'd 2).
Song called Stay Awhile. Was at the beach for the week on vacation hence the theme I used. Only had time to record the vocals once, so they're a bit flat in spots. Could have done better there.
Lying here on the beach
Everything's out of reach
Staring out at the sea
Close our eyes and taste the breeze
Won’t you lay with me
Listen to waves crash constantly
Hand in hand we
Absorb the sun and feel free
Let the world fall aside
What interferes through the years
Roll away with the tide
Like a child
Ear to the ground and hear her sound
And just smile
Just stay awhile
Let’s walk along the shoreline
Make sure to unwind
This just feels like a perfect time
Let our busy life float away
It would feel like a crime
If the end has to arrive
I seem to find
Don’t want to end the day
Nice work :D I like the feel of the song, use of 4 chords and prosody of words and music.
The one area that I'd consider revising is V4 b/c the rest of the song does a good job of being in the moment, but to mention "feel like a crime"....and "I seem to find" seems a bit forced....just try to dig a bit deeper to stay in the moment.
Thanks for sharing'
Agreed on that last verse, I didn't like it either. Just thought the song needed a 4th verse and it was a . I was going to go back and rewrite it at one point this week/month and rerecord. I really fell in love with this chord progression and the rhythm the song developed.
Thanks for the feedback as always!