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(@sabalo)
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Sophie

I left out of Skagway Sophie and Me
Eager to beat the hoar frost to the coast
Only way to Vancouver is to run by sea
Taking the Princess she' best they boast

leaving out at midnight runnin on the wind
Princess her colors flying in the breeze
All was fine to the headland and then
It bore down like hell from 60 degrees

Don't be afraid Sophie
You are safe with me
Hold your head up sophie
We'll get through you'll see

It was a tempest ner before seen
That drove Princess hard that night
Onto the reef she goes rocks large and keen
safe the Princess holds fast and tight

For forty hours the mountainous walls of brine
Try to drive the Princess down
Forty hours rescuers give their time
No possible way could be found

Don't be afraid Sophie
You are safe with me
Keep your head up Sophie
We'll get through you'll see

Last call put out just after eight
There came one last thunderous push
Princess broke free from the water weight
In comes the sea in a rush

Now Princess must truly fight
For the lives of 300 souls
She knows she must stay water tight
To guard the secret in her holds

Don't be afraid Sophie
You are safe with me
Hold your head up Sophie
We'll get through you'll see

Into the darkened wind blown sea
The Sophie now is driven
Onto the upper decks all must flee
Knowing her hull is riven

Down we go now Sophie my love
Deep down into the abyss
I tried to save you with help from above
But I fear we are gone to the myst

I'm so sorry Sophie my love
I tried my best you see
We'll still protect the Treasure
Together at the bottom of the sea

From the wreck of the Princess Sophia
She went down off the Alaskan coast, in 1918
All 343 souls perished in the icy Alaskan waters
The Sophia was rumored to have held more than
a million dollars worth of Gold on board when she
went down

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(@davidhodge)
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Hi Sabalo

I like this a lot, especially in the little touches, like the contraction, "ne'er" for "never," which certainly would be something a turn of the (last) century poet / songwriter might say.

But it's also the language that makes the lyric a little rough in places, such as the last line of the first stanza. You might want to try to tighten the language up in a few spots, but all in all this is a wonderful period piece. Can't wait to hear it!

And looking forward to more.

Peace


   
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(@barnabus-rox)
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Hi

I liked the story this told , and the imagery that conger ed up in my mind as I read it , I was hearing A minor , E , F being softly finger picked with that Spanish flavor ...Not that I can do it though

Nice writing what music did you have in mind ?

Cheers

Trev.. :wink:

Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am


   
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