Wow.... Has it really been 10 weeks since I posted a song!....?
Well, this isn't something that I just wrote.... It's actually a few years old.
Hope that's okay....?
Some of you might remember when I first started here at GN and I was askin' questions
about 9th chords.... It was for this song.
It's not terribly original; I certainly wear my influences on my sleeve with this one....
From the Allman Brothers in the first verse, to Robert Johnson in the second/end of third, and a line
influenced by The King of Rock & Roll (Buddy Holly) in the third.
Even the title ~ it's a line from a Neil Young song, lol.
It basically (for the moment) has a droning open E bass with a D6 (I think) and an E9 played over it.
I'll try to put a demo together so you get the idea.
Any suggestions would be welcome ~ especially with the 2nd verse; the 'wont ever let me settle down' line.
Thankx,
Ken
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When I wake up every morning
Just another day with the Blues
Been cast out of the Garden
All for the crime of loving you
Now I'm stuck up on this mountain
and The sky is fallin' down
and there's No lovin' anywhere
In this wilderness....
to be found
When I wake up in the mornin'
There's no one next to me
Ya see I gotta keep movin'
'cause that Devil plays for keeps
He got a Hellhound on my trail now
Won't ever let me settle down
Now I'm standin' at the crossroads
I do believe
I'm sinkin' down now (yeah)
Well, I'm not gittin' up this mornin'
Can't face A World without you
Wishin', Hopin', & a Prayin'
Keep on dreamin' like a fool
She can't take that away from me Lord
Just like I can't make it come true
Now I'm standin' at the crossroads
Time to pay
....the Devil his due
"The man who has begun to live more seriously within
begins to live more simply without"
-Ernest Hemingway
"A genuine individual is an outright nuisance in a factory"
-Orson Welles
Nothing wrong with wearing your heart on your sleeve......
Dunno why you was worried about posting this (all the explanations and forgive-me-in-advances....) it reads fine to me....
Even the line you singled out that you weren't 100% happy with - "Won't ever let me settle down" seems to suit the general mood of the song and seems to follow the previous line OK...
"He got a Hellhound on my trail now
Won't ever let me settle down".............nothing wrong with that, conjures up the image of a man just drifting, can't find peace, as you say, can't settle down.....
The only part I'm not happy with is this.....
"Now I'm standin' at the crossroads
I do believe
I'm sinkin' down now"........
That's just waaaaayy too cliched - maybe turn it around a little?
"I may go back to the crossroads,
get my feet back on the ground...."
Or something similar - up to you, it's your song! For what it's worth, I like this - I could imagine strappin' the Tele on and running through this song and singing it.....and surely that's a sign you're on the right path? Someone else thinks "Hmmmm, wish I'd written this?"
Oh and yeah, you should DEFINITELY try and find more time to write - ain't too many articulate blue-collar philosophers about..............
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
I like that you opened yourself up and poured your feelings/influences out into this song. The best way (IMHO) to finish it is to channel that same groove again - possiblly by singing it to yourself over and over until it comes back to you.
Agree on the crossroads piece. How about this:
Now I'm standin' at the crossroads
Of somewhere
And nowhere
and consider shaping the coda this way:
Now I'm standin' at the crossroads
Of somewhere
And nowhere
Standin' at the crossroads
Of up
and down yeah
Standin' at the crossroads
Of in
And out yeah
But I'm still no closer
To you
Time to pay the Devil
His due
