Line 1 (starts the song): "They know who I am"
Line 2(starts the chorus): "Ask someone who loves me" Â
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(Hope I got it right this week Nick) Â :)
This song is about a guy who's got in with the wrong crowd, then they set him up for murder..
I sing this one with ALOT of attitude! I try to be the guy in the story and he's really argry. Â ;D
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They know, who I am..
They chose me, They chose me
Just part, of their plan..
They used me, they used me
I didn't kill, anyone..
They blamed me, They blamed me
Im not the one, that fired the gun
They framed me, they framed me
Ask someone who loves me
If you want your answers
If you want the truth
Ask someone who loves me
Then you'll find your answers
And you'll find, the truth
Murder, first degree
They charged me, they charged me
Slamed the door & threw away the key
They Jailed me, they jailed me
Ask someone who loves me
If you want your answers
If you want the truth
Ask someone who loves me
Then you'll find your answers
And you'll find, the truth..
(Repeat chorus to end)
;D
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Me likey. This sounds pretty good.
formerly "new writer" until someone said they didn't like my name
Very nice; I definitely can imagine someone belting out the lyrics in anger and frustration.
My only comment is that the line:
Slamed the door & threw away the key
seems a bit long compared to the corresponding 3rd lines of the other verses (but if you already have this covered with your melody, just disregard this message).
Maybe change to:
Slammed the door and threw the key
or substitue "threw" with "dumped/chucked/tossed"
- silly putty
How about "smashed the key"? Keeping the violence of the verb "slam" rolling along.
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Nice work Heelsy.
suggest on this line:
Then you'll find your answers
And you'll find, the truth
Try:
Then you'll find your answers
There you'll find, the truth
Sounds stronger....IMO.
