This is a song about my twisted thought process regarding relationships lol... I see what I do, but I do it anyway, and then im left with the memories. I dont know how well I got it out, but it is what it is haha.
As far as music, for the verse I was thinking just going back and fort between 2 chords like A and E and then for the chorus dropping half a step and making it a minor. real simple but I think it could be cool.
Theres a place,
I cant see,
Where the words,
Are part of me,
Just one track,
With nothing left,
Where can I,
Take these words back,
Ive misplaced
But I cant leave you ... Even after all ive said,
And I cant leave you... Although I cant take one word back.
Ive seen,
Another land,
Where these words,
Dont take,
a liars hand,
I dont know,
where I am,
Woud you save me?
If you can?
But I cant leave you... Even after all I said,
And I cant leave you... Although I cant take one word back,
Now I,
Am left to hide,
In my love,
And memories,
I cant take this,
Ive tried It,
All I guess,
Theres one bridge left,
One last river I cant swim
but im leaving... Even after all I said,
I left you... Cuz I cant take one damn word back.
Can you take my,
Heartless thoughts,
Even after,
All ive lost?
Ive chased you,
Through my dreams,
In my lovely,
Heroin,
Now im not me...
But im leaving... Even after all I said,
And I left this, Cuz I cant take one word back...
SHUT UP ABOUT IRON MAIDEN SOLOS AND GO PRACTICE!
-Manitou
looks good to me, reads something along the lines of a Lou Reed song - I can imagine Lou singing this - and that's a compliment!
Buuuuuuuuuuuuuuut - I've got to say it again, please check your spelling and grammar, and especially where apostrophes should go - a good post (or a good song) could be a GREAT post, it's all down to presentation.....it does count for a lot!
Nice effort, keep it up!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)