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Hi this is the first time in a very long time i have posted any thing i hope I did this right . This is a rough recording of this tune it still needs work and this will be added to my song list to work on with the rest of the band . Thank you all for looking and letting me know what you think.
Railroad Man
He’s a railroad man hard and cold as steel
He’s a railroad man hard and cold as steel
All he lives for is the humming of that driven wheel
Can’t you hear them rolling down the track
Can’t you hear them rolling down the track
Don’t know where his going or if he coming back
The sound of the rails is all he can hear
It’s like a sweet, sweet women whispering in his ear
Come to me, come to me my dear
His a railroad man
He just a Railroad man
He lives for the sound of them humming of the wheels
He’s a railroad man hard and cold as steel
He’s a railroad man hard and cold as steel
All he lives for is the humming of that driven wheel
Life is not what you did. It's what you are doing.
Sounds very good. Great guitar work too. I hope you keep writing with us.
Sounds very good. Great guitar work too. I hope you keep writing with us.
+1
The guitar work is inspirational 8)
Suggestion:
All the other lines work great but this line could use some adjusting
"Don’t know where his going and he don’t if he comes back"
This line is ok, but try something closer to your signature tag "Life is not what you did. It's what you are doing."
...so something along the lines of "miles ahead, miles at his back"
b/c he's not a traveler/wanderer/vagabond.......he's a railroad man.....it's pretty clear to know where the railroad tracks go and they will only come back on the same tracks.......and he loves his job going back and forth on those same tracks.......so more a line about enjoying the journey instead of reaching a destination.
Thanks for sharing and welcome to SSG :mrgreen:
James
Thank you and I will be submitting tunes to this site I am working on getting together songs for my second CD and this is a great way of getting ideas for them. I am going to revisit this song with what you have suggested in mind and see what comes of it. The idea is that he only loves his job and that because of it he is lonely and hard and void of loving feelings. But I like the angle you have on it as well and see possibilities there too. Thank you for taking the time to listen and for giving me feedback this is why I am here again to work on my craft.
This is a link to my reverbnation page and our web page http://www.reverbnation.com/blueslightning http://blueslightning.com/ ther is music form the CD there and the trio as well .
Life is not what you did. It's what you are doing.
This is a link to my reverbnation page and our web page http://www.reverbnation.com/blueslightning http://blueslightning.com/ ther is music form the CD there and the trio as well .
Sounds like your having a lot of fun 8)
