hi all..just one i wrote bored at work today,would like some advice on wether to change the ending or not,was just one i wrote for fun..thanks
charlie was a good kid
v1
charlie was a good little kid
he made his mother proud
but she'll never forget what he did
he gave her a nervous breakdown
i'll tell you the story....
v2
he always did so well at school
he had so many friends
he'd never bend or break the rules
always there to lend a hand
v3
he left school with qualifications
went to university
he'd found his inspiration
and left with a degree
v4
he told his mum about his friends
who steal to pay for addiction
as soon as she turns the other way
charlie steals her prize possession
chorus
ohh charlie...why..oh why?
ohh charlie..you were the perfect child..
but now youve thrown your life away
steal things to pay for drugs you take..
v5
his mother noticed what hed done
and threw him on the streets
now he's not her perfect son
who no-one could ever compete..
v6
charlies addictions taken over his life
hes got no possessions of his own
he used to say hed find a beautiful wife
and have a family a car and a home....
chorus
ohh charlie...why..oh why?
ohh charlie..you were the perfect child..
but now youve thrown your life away
steal things to pay for drugs you take..
"people laugh at me because im different...i pity you..because your all the same"
HI GAZ
First of I want a job like yours , :D you seem to write a lot at work lately and your seems to read pretty well for me . 8)
As for any changes NO I would leave it the way it is :lol:
cheers
L.K :arrow:
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Have to agree with LottoKing. Don't change it, it's pretty good the way it is.
