Choices

ooops made a bobo

Hi trever nice lyrics have you recorded yet? I just seen a couple things that I would probably make changes to but all in all its good
mystic :wink:

Choices

Its the choices we make
The hearts that we break
The lies that we told >>>I would change told to tell because it only refers to the past and the rest of the verse is past, present, futer
With regret we get old

The lives that we make
The wives that we take
Passion turns to distain
unwanted and maimed >>>>it just popped into my head

Its the choices we make
The hearts that we break
The lies that we told >>>>tell
With regret we get old

Our hearts grow older
Our memories get colder
Still yearning to hold her

Its the choices we make
The hearts that we break
The lies that we told
With regret we get old

Now sitting reflecting
The lies rearecting
Just crying and regretting
things we have done (another pop in)

Its the choices we make
The hearts that we break
The lies that we told >>>>>tell
With regret we get old

Thanks for your feed back Mystic ,

Question 1 ..No I can't record as my hand is plaster , broken finger and fractured knuckle ...{ big boys playing little boys games }..

Its the choices we make
The hearts that we break
The lies that we told >>>I would change told to tell
With regret we get old

If I do that the ryhme scheme falls apart IMO ..

How ever I do like your little pop ins but if I add them I will have to add a line to every 3 line verse to keep uniformity through out the song , something that I can re-visit ...

The last Verse is someone sitting back reflecting on their life that was full of lies , and also I think ties in with the lies being told line ...

But thank you for your feed back as always very informative and helpful ..

Thank you

Trevor

ps

I had a chuckle at Bobo , my son uses that as his nickname in forums

Hello

:lol: thats funny your son uses that as his name :lol:

sorry to hear about your hand man that SUCKS !! how long befor you can play again?

I totally hear wear your coming from on the song, isn't it funny how one little word or line can throw you all out of wack
any way good lyrics,
i read it over again after I got back your point of veiw and the told part makes sents now

:D Mystic

I got back to the Doctor Friday ,

My hand isn't the handicap of my playing ...

My lack of ability has that one covered well and truely :lol: :lol:

I'm glad you can see where this is going now as sometimes the writter knows and the the reader has no clue ..Which makes it a very ordinary story IMO ..

Yeah he has been useing Bobo for about 12 months , he asked if he could join a guitar site { I was slightly hopeing this one } But no and I have made a promise to myself not to go where he is , so he can have his own interaction with other people learning to play like him with out dad looking over his shoulder so to say ....

Trevor