(verse)
i've never been down in all my years of living
but you have got me down today
i've never thought to frown after years of sinning
now you have got me down to stay (congradulations)
(chorus)
you have figured me out
you have cracked my code
and you smile proudly because you know you have the upper hand now
(verse)
i've never been at the mercy of someone before
what do i hav to do to erase this from your memory?
i don't want to hear about this anymore
how much will it cost to replace this in our history?
(chorus)
you have figured me out
you have cracked my code
and you smile proudly because you know you have the upper hand now
(bridge)
lies and blackmail have got me down
don't feel bad if you don't want me around
i'd understand if i was nothing to you
i'll get past this even if i have to go through you
(verse)
i've never been down in all my years of living
but you have got me down today
i've never thought to frown after years of sinning
now you have got me down to stay (congradulations)
im just looking for some feedback....i just wrote this about 15 mins ago. but ive never thought i was good at writing lyrics. i guess im just looking for tips or constructive critisism
Hey there
firstly I would write your chorus like this :
you have figured me out
you have cracked my code
and you smile proudly because you know
you have the upper hand now
just a little thing to me and i'm sure others will disagree with me but thats how I would do it
why is congradulations in brackets ?
apart from what I have mentioned I liked it , the flow was nice even though the topic is a bit dark and sad
cheers
L.K
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
thats actually how i originally had the chorus, but i decided to change it for some reason.. i'll change it back
