Here's a first draft of a new song i'm writing, tell me what you think! :D :D
I'd rather not say
Crumbs on a plate leftover from a meal I just ate
Little pieces of life no one wants to know about
Here's the showdown and you're gone again
Like a shadow living in another land
This is something I don't like to tell
But I've got to find a way to get this out of my shell
It's a thought left behind (it's) crushed in time
Like a bubble that burst it couldn't be worse
People don't know it cause I never show it
That's for sure
A hand held high silhouetted in the sky
Why aren't there two what happened to you
Under the sparkle of night things changed
This is so different than how I arranged
These are words I'd rather not say
Somehow I share them anyway
I don't think it should happen this way
These are the words I'd rather not say
You left me but it was my fault
It was the difference if the way I thought
Why was I such a jerk
I could have made things work
Alright. Here this goes again
Hi jamesgrubb
its a good start i don't think you have to do to much to it, maybe some fine tuning
so it grabs the attention of your reader good luck with the rewrite
mystic
Finally!! Thank you, i think i'll work on the rewrite first thing!