Ok, I took the oppertunity to write this now while I'm severely angry at my parents. It will be bad but hopefully quite a bit of emotion will be portrayed in it.
It's not my normal style of writing, this piece is very emo. Well, here you go, have fun tearing this one apart.
Falling to my knees
I can't take it any more,
This building pain inside,
It's hard to carry on,
I want to let go,
End this suffering,
Leave me alone,
Is it too much to ask?
Your presence haunts me,
I hear your voice resounding in my mind
Chilling to the bone,
I'm falling to my knees,
I want to be free,
Don't *ing tell me to go to bed,
Tell me to return my guitar
Tell me to give up,
Threaten to take everything away from me,
I don't give a *,
I have nothing,
I don't want to be like you,
Give me a chance to be me
Not part of your flawed design
Someone throw me a lifeline,
I'm drowning in this pool of sorrow,
Intoxicating,
This endless suffering is unbearable,
Falling to my knees,
Let it end
Not to bad. I got the message.
In the following you may want to add the "Don't"s in front of the the two following lines where the * are or it is hard to follow.
Don't *ing tell me to go to bed,
* Tell me to return my guitar
* Tell me to give up,
A little tweaking and it is actually pretty good.
I got the message too. Powerful. Though I agree with Nils on those two lines. I like it though. If you record it, can I play it for my parents?
I understand exactly!!!
