This is the first time for me posting a compostion here. This song is not autobiographical. I have the melody and chords already, should I include those here? -Think syncopation. I hear it in a Johnny Cash type of voice.
I've been sitting in this dark, house for hours
Wishing I was Spiderman, I had super powers
You know, if I had wings, I'd fly away
It feels like this might be our final day
The sink holds one dirty dish
Wish our fighting hadn't come to this
If I had wings, I'd fly away
It feels like this might be our final day
Got an aching body and a broken heart
Life's a race, but I missed the start
If I had wings, I'd fly away
Just like the old song, I'd fly away
I'll fly away oh glory
I'll, I'll fly away.
When I die, Hallelujah, I'll fly
When I die, I'll fly
The night is empty, I'm missing you
If you don't come back, what will I do?
You know, if I had wings, I'd fly away
It feels like this might be our final day
I'll fly away oh glory
I'll, I'll fly away.
When I die, Hallelujah, I'll fly
When I die, I'll fly
Since the chorus is a twist on an established, traditional song I'm thinking maybe I should start with the chorus. Input is appreciated.
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There haven't been any comments. I decided to make some changes anyway.
D
I've been sitting in this dark, house for hours
D
Feeling sorry for myself, wish that I had the power
G D
To reverse our loves decay
A G D
It feels like this might be our final day
The sink holds one dirty dish
Wish our fighting hadn't come to this
I open my mouth but theres nothing to say
It feels like this might be our final day
D D7
I'll fly away oh glory
G D
I'll, I'll fly away.
A G D
When I die, Hallelujah, I'll fly
A G D
When I die, (rest) I'll fly
The night is empty, I'm missing you
If you don't come back, what will I do?
How could I have just stood there when you drove away?
It feels like this might be our final day
Got an aching body and a broken heart
Life's a race, but I missed the start
This has been a devastating day
If I had wings, I'd fly away
I'll fly away oh glory
I'll, I'll fly away.
When I die, Hallelujah, I'll fly
When I die, (rest) I'll fly
Repeat first verse
Any comments?
Third edit. I changed the chorus
D
I've been sitting in this dark, house for hours
D
Feeling sorry for myself, wish that I had the power
G D
To bring you back, reverse our loves decay
A G D
It feels like this might be our final day
The sink holds one dirty dish
Wish our fighting hadn't come to this
I open my mouth but theres nothing to say
If I had wings, I'd fly away
(chorus)
D D7
I'll fly away oh glory
G D
I'll, I'll fly away.
A G
When I die, when I die
D
I'll fly
The night is empty, I'm missing you
If you don't come back, what will I do?
Why did I stand there when you drove away?
It feels like this might be our final day
Got an aching body and a broken heart
Life's a race, but I missed the start
This has been a devastating day
If I had wings, I'd fly away
chorus
Added a sound file
I like it...the melody fits the words well and it has a lot of feeling. While listening to it, I can envision the other instruments parts too. It's obviously a very rough version, but that could be polished into an absolute gem. I could picture the man in black, Johnny Cash performing this.
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