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(@lostbeggining)
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In Me

V
Feelings, eroded, in all of this time.
We knew all, between us, would never be right
Rembering heartache, a while before
And all of, the pain that, this storm had caused

C
We knew that time wouldnt take this away
When we shone our light through the darkest of days
Screaming at the reasons to just make it change
Oh but i knew this darkness would still remain
In me

V
Feelings, so burnt out, through all of the pain
So shallow, and shattered, we go back again
When no ones, to blame and, were tired of hurt
We push it, so much further, but just make it worse

C
We knew that time wouldnt take this away
When we shone our light through the darkest of days
Screaming at the reasons to just make it change
Oh but i knew this darkness would still remain
In me

B
So what ran in the shadows
And shot us in the dark
Made all this emptyness
Sleep in our hearts
If life has the answers
We all hope to find
Will someone share the secreat
Before we all, run out of time

C
We knew that time wouldnt take this away
When we shone our light through the darkest of days
Screaming at the reasons to just make it change
Oh but i knew this darkness would still remain
In me

Rain Shadow


   
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(@guitargeek)
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wow! this is really good i like the rhyming and it flows wonderfully! good job!


   
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(@sjt1316)
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Outstanding Edwin. I really enjoy this song. There were a couple of places were I felt I needed an extra syllable, but I could just be singing it wrong :wink:

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(@musicmaniac221)
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my god man, you have a thing for writing songs i must say. Very good!

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(@lostbeggining)
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hey, thanks guys!!...yeah there is likely to be a few syllables missin as i just concentrated more on getting the lyrics exact more than the meter which is a one off cuz usually i like to make sure everything fits even if i have to take a word i like out etc....and i came up with the melody first with this one which i dont usually do....i wanted to post it cuz it was really kinda stuck in a rut n i didnt like it much as it stands now ^....think it need somet..even if a small thing....2 kinda bring it more 2 life?....hmmmm i dunno.....but thanks a lot guys!!!! muchly appreciated!!!!!!!!!!!

NeM

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(@cooker)
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LB..there you go again..writin` my life down and puttin` it on the net.....I like this one too...the bridge stands out..!
PS...get a dog! LOL.....

You can sleep when you`re dead!
"and baby all you need...is just a little more love"


   
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(@lostbeggining)
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Lol thanks again.....but um...why a dog? lol.................

Rain Shadow


   
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(@cooker)
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Lb...a dogs life isn`t as complicated as ours....thier companionship and loyalty are unconditional or minimal at the very least....

You can sleep when you`re dead!
"and baby all you need...is just a little more love"


   
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(@lostbeggining)
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lol ok..... :roll: .i dont have a complicated life really.....quite a lot of songs i write from other ppls perspective or are just storys.......the one above ^ is from my view and about me n that but .....well it varies i guess........

Rain Shadow


   
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(@cooker)
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LB...it was just a poor attempt at humor...sorry if I offended you..cooker

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(@lostbeggining)
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lol nah man...i just get easily confused.....i took it as more of a compliment,

cheers!!

Rain Shadow


   
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(@cooker)
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LB..I know the feeling.....trying to figure out this new recorder......the manual says all you need to get started is a power source,a couple of inputs,speakers and your ready to go....they should have shipped this thing with a child....I messed with it a couple of hours and then called my 14yr old daughter over...had it up and runnin`in 10 min.....I feel so much at the bottom of a steep learning curve.....cooker

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(@lotto-king)
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Hi

nothing more for me to add here I think it's all been said I'll just sign up and say this is really good but songs written by you are always well written and flow wonderfully

keep up the good work

cheers
L.K

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Not only am I a senior citizen

I'm now a bloody senior member

Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?

over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )


   
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