Lord Save My Soul

More than month ago I wrote song...add simple chords and played but still working on song melody and also having problem with singing...start learning singing now at age 35. Here down is my song and videos...on first one I sing (think I sing) on others are just versions of melody. Last one...the fifth version... I think would be good but have feeling something missing.

Lord save my soul

Oh, Lord would you save me,
Save me from this painful body,
body full of fear and missery life,
oh, Lord where are you now when I need you ?

Oh, Lord would you save me,
Save me from this prison body,
Oh, Lord pull out my soul from that body,
And make me free.

Oh, Lord I can't stand no more in this world,
There is that evil force of darkness,
Can't you see how I safer,
Oh, Lord I have no strenght and will,
Save my soul and take my pain !

Oh, Lord would you save me,
Save me from this prison body,
Oh, Lord pull out my soul from that body,
And make me free.

Oh, Lord why now that emptyness and darkness, I can't see,
What's now that funy and strange filing of speed,
Oh, Lord where did that feeling for time go,
Oh, Lord what are you doing whit me ?

Oh, Lord would you save me,
Save me from this prison body,
Oh, Lord pull out my soul from that body,
And make me free.

Oh, Lord where are you now, when I need you,
Why, Lord that light now and so many people,
Where am I, Lord would you tell me, what's this world for ?
Oh, Lord tell me why every thing sine
and tell me, why those people are like a stars.

Oh, Lord would you save me,
Save me from this prison body,
Oh, Lord pull out my soul from that body,
And make me free.

Oh, Lord did you save me,
Tell me did you do it,
Why does my body sine,
And tell me, what caind of place is this,
Now the world is difrent.

Videos :
1. version http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9X_oLwcBQQY
2. version http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RuPteLkneUM
3. version http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZYQ-KdWrjdw
4. version http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lWPtVAH-T3g
5. version http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ms4zxYV9rzA

Well,...that's all...but this is first song I working on. Would be happy to hear your sugestions !

Sorry for my english...I am not so good. Thanks.

Nice day to all

Nenad