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(@devikta)
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I walk the streets now
I see your face in everything
Things have changed now
I can't imagine what it'd be like without you

By my side. You're hand in mine. You're blue eyes telling me that it's all right.

And I have you to thank for everything.
You're beautiful in ways you do not know.

We still fight now
But things have changed from the way they used to be
I touch your hand now
And it all seems to melt away

It's come together now
I can tell by the warmth in your kiss
Won't let you go now
'Cause I can't imagine what it'd be like without you

By my side. You're hand in mine. You're blue eyes telling me that it's all right.

And I have you to thank for everything.
You're beautiful in ways that you don't know.

We're old and gray now
But you're just as fine as the day we met
Not far away now
I couldn't have done it without you

By my side. You're hand in mine. You're blue eyes telling me that it's all right.

And I have you to thank for everything.
You're beautiful in ways that you don't know.

And I want you to know I love you.
You're beautiful in ways that you don't know.

I need you to know you're my forever.
You're beautiful in ways that you don't know.

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(@snoogans775)
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It took a long time before you satiated my desire for imagery with the "hand's melting", which kept me reading, but because of this, I completely forgot everything you said in the beginning

I loved th repetition, and the structure woulda ctually be very manageable into a song

I don't follow my dreams, I just ask em' where they're going and catch up with them later.
-Mitch Hedburg
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(@devikta)
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It took a long time before you satiated my desire for imagery with the "hand's melting", which kept me reading, but because of this, I completely forgot everything you said in the beginning

I loved th repetition, and the structure woulda ctually be very manageable into a song

I guess I could be explicit and say,

I touch your hand now
And all our problems melt away.

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(@snoogans775)
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I explained that wrong

I don't think that line is the problem, it's the absence of anything like it at the beginning of the song, and the hands melting thing gives a really wonderful image, so I wouldn't change it

it's really hard to change the beginning of a song rather than the middle or end of it, but maybe a description of the streets would give a foothold

I walk the "crumbling" streets now
I see your face in everything
Things have changed now
I can't imagine what it'd be like without you

I don't follow my dreams, I just ask em' where they're going and catch up with them later.
-Mitch Hedburg
Did you see that!


   
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