I'm new to this whole website malarky, but this is a song I wrote a couple of weeks ago which I was curious for feedback on. So thanks in advance for any views!
Want to play
Want to play
The bright colours
And shiny, shiny greys
Too much too young
No one can justify
Or even understand
How is it like this?
Stuck on media
Stuck on mind
Heinous crime after heinous crime
Stuck on media
Stuck on mind
Minor offences
Worst of all kinds
Minds are sick
Minds need cures
Want to play
Want to play
The bright colours
And shiny, shiny greys
Stop poisoning
And ruining
And destroying
The purest of pures
The whitest of whites
Stuck on body
Stuck on spirit
Stuck on mind
Stuck on soul
Stuck on
Stuck on
Stuck on
Welcome! :D
It's hard to comment on your song or lyrics, without music.
But I have a nephew in a Screamo or Techno band, and on the net. These lyrics would go with that or Death Metal.
I hope that is appropriate or what you had in mind. It's fine depending on the context and genre, good luck, join in. 8)
Like a bird on the wire,
like a drunk in a midnight choir
I have tried in my way to be free.
