...well its not my first lyric that I've written but the first one that I post.
I really like it, it's far from perfect but I can't write it any other way....
So feel free to bash me hard! :)
and here it goes:
Nihilistic Moment
1)
Sometimes when you were on travel biz
I feared that you would never return.
It sneaks and closes in on me
But that's not my only concern.
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When we were living all together.
With more power with more haste.
Those were the days of grace and cold.
Sometimes I feel like all the ground that gets sold.
RF1)
It took me 2 years and 3 month to pull and fire my guns.
But now I fire and forget this step that once scratched my life to wreck.
2)
Do I think because I'm lonely
Or am I lonely because I think?
I rest assured it's not the only
Time I feel like all the fears that you bring.
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The games you learn, the pain you earn
And the fame that turns your back at you
Are lack of smooth control.
Sometimes I feel like the only one that gets old.
RF2)
It took me 46 weeks to accept I'm not a god with depth.
And so I quit my kingdom that sings on cruel kings and follows sweet sins.
I'm stuck inside my luck
That's why I can't see it, breath it or live it.
I don't believe in you
Coz you can't believe in something that you know.
RF3)
It took me seven days and sixteen nights to get my life alright.
And now I'm living up living up, but not to my hype.
Or at least not to all your type.
In a week of this year for one minute in an hour
I thought back at you, realized that I'm through.
I realized that I'm through.
I realized that I'm through.
No, my problems ain't you.
No, my problems ain't you.
No, my problems ain't you anymore.
NO MORE THEORY!!
um...
KNOW MORE THEORY!!!!
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motz
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Bash you hard " where some timber so I belt you around the head " only joking (lol)
Works for me
cheers
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Welcome to the forum! I'm kind of new, too.
I liked the song. Good stuff. Keep posting.
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
Thanks for your replies
Sorry if I sounded somehow harsh at the beginning.
It's not that I don't want to hear (well, read.. :) )any critiques, I just wanted to say that I'm a bit nostalgic about this lyric so, it would be kinda hard to change something... if you know what I mean... :?
but it doesn't mean that I don't like critques. :P
CU!
NO MORE THEORY!!
um...
KNOW MORE THEORY!!!!
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motz
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It does it for me too.
A :-)
"Be good at what you can do" - Fingerbanger"
I have always felt that it is better to do what is beautiful than what is 'right'" - Eliot Fisk
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hi :wink:
a little late reply, but well, just saw this and read this and was like... oh this is beautiful.
especially the first two choruses are adorable, I love them!
overall I like the feeling I get from this, like watching a movie that's all in blue. this song is blue for me;)
some of my favourite lines apart from the choruses are these:
Those were the days of grace and cold.
Sometimes I feel like all the ground that gets sold.
Sometimes I feel like the only one that gets old.-that's me! :wink:
In a week of this year for one minute in an hour...
very well done, in my opinion.
just wanted to drop you some lines, let you know I love it.
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
