It all seems so clear by night
But Its just recycled feelings making use of the lack of light
They make me believe so very much
They make me believe so very much
I tell myself it's the voices double bluffing me again
Double bluffing me again
My friends with their ‘problems'
I could cure with my thoughts
Put myself in their shoes and walk out of the dark
But for me you see its not that easy
I cannot simply walk away
Frustrating at times
Pure torture in others
But whether it be a gun to my head
Or a pill that you left by my bed
One day….
One day…
Its all to hard to explain myself
But I'm just reassuring my mind its all their fault
They make me believe I'm gonna do some good
They make me believe I'm gonna do some good
Its just home comfort sending me to sleep tonight
Comfort sending me to sleep
The kid with his ‘attitude'
Only gonna get you as far as the streets
Put myself in his shoes and go home to his family
But for me you see that's not my problem
I cannot change who I am
So I'm left in my
Lonely cage tonight
But whether it be a gun to my head
Or a pill that you left by my bed
One day….
One day…
I'm sorry did I use the wrong word
What are you afraid of?
I'm afraid I haven't got the nerve….
Hey!
Did you miss any off the bottom? Just you've got a comma there, that's all:I'm sorry did I use the wrong word
What are you afraid of?
I'm afraid I haven't got the nerve….wasn't sure it you meant to carry on.
Anyway - it's good! The chorus is particularly excellent:But whether it be a gun to my head
Or a pill that you left by my bed
One day….
One day…
The main thing I would say is that it might be better with a little expansion on why you are caught in this vicious cycle - why you can't walk away, why you can't change.
Or that vagueness might be what you are going for! In which case, fair enough, there's nothing wrong with it like this. Just think it could be even better. What you have is really well written.
The whole putting yourself in their shoes/calling it one day in my shoes it cool too.
G
Listen Louder Than You Play
oops sorry i didnt mean to put a commar there!! in case noone got the last part..it is about suicide....not having the nerve...
as for what you said about why its such a vicious circle..i didnt think i needed to explain that...its just how i was feeling at a certain time and that was it realy..thank you for you comment!
Really liked it. I liked that there was no explaination for having the feelings, because I think it makes the listener relate more to it. I got the suicide part, and thought that there were a lot of clever lines in this one. Keep it up!
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
