"storytime"

Quality. The only thing I thought was that the line "the boy's mother fell" is just a little too obvious. I thought maybe using something like "the simple mother fell" but I'm not sure it carries the right connotation; I do think it could benefit from a different word there though. "...suffering mother..." maybe?

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A :-)

Is the boy underneath the glass or is the story he's writing underneath it or is it symbolic?

I'm not sure I get the drop thing. I can see the drop of blood, but what's "a drop of a smoking shell?" Does that mean it dropped or is the drop a visual like the drop of blood?

And if honor ruled they day, why does evil pay?

And finally (just tell me to shutup at anytime) storytime confused me because I was expecting a story of a child being told a story, but then the mother is killed (I'm assuming by the father although the song never mentions it) so I'm thinking, was the mother telling stories? No, the child was writing stories. I'm a bit confused.

First off thanks for comments...and I thought the same thing A, but havent gotten around to messing around with it. Now as far as what the boys underneath it can be both or it can be symbolic. Just depends on how you see it. The drop of a smoking shell, really well just kinda find the song and if you ever seen some guns the casing is ejected from the gun and falls to the ground. and as far as why evil paid...good triumphed over evil...lots of people associates good with honor and well..its a syllable (sp?) thing. And as far as the title it suits the...umm setting (im not sure how to describe it) Because its talking about the child's perspective and storytime is associated with children. Umm I think that answers everything. I just feel good that you put that much thought into it.

Thanks
Micheal