here is a little something im working on any input would be great thanks
:wink: mystic
I know a lady a lonley lady
always livin in the past
shadows filed away
neatly on the shelf
she holds her head up high
cant see threw the clouds in her eyes
they say shes a women, but she aint got no soul
she holds onto the past,to scared to unfold
for in the shaddows cobb webs have growen
and she grows another year older
and still it weighs heavy on her shoulders
and into the dark she crawls
another endless night
looking for the light she can not find
and so it echoes threw my head
all the words that go un said
and she proudly holds her self up high
they say shes a woman but she aint got no soul
she holds onto the past to scared to un fold
comments are needed please anything will help good or bad just need some feed back
thanks :wink: mystic
It's really good, nice imagery and a good balance to it. (Sorry I can't offer any more than that, I'm going to be in need of some songwriting help myself once I get a few more other projects out of the way :wink:)
Misanthrope
thanks for the reply, i will be watching for your stuff for we all know how important the critiquing of a song is wether it be good or bad it all helps us to be better writters.
again thanks
:wink: mystic