...for me...you see i normally have a problem with writing way too many words. so for this song a decided to just saya word to describe the emotion....the track doesn have a name yet. i offered for the person t was written about to name it but she hasnt yet.
Is it too much to handle?
Pain fear death feel
Life...life
Is there a light?
Show me the night
How long to fight?
The end in sight
Is it too much to argue
Truth distance try cry
I mean no wrong
Search find belong
How long to fight?
The end in sight
You can fight
The end in sight
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hmmmmmm....is it that bad? :S
Not at all, coleclark! I rather like the song. :)
My only suggestion: "Is there a light" followed by "show me the night" seems illogical, as someone wondering whether there is light must already have darkness, no?
I would substute an identity for a rhyme here:
Is there a light
Show me the light
The identity expresses a little desperation, and it supports the minimalism of your lyric in this tune.
But again, just a thought. Feed your muse! Your song is really nice!
Best,
Jersey Jack
i didnt wanna write 'show me the light' cause its so cliched :S
show me the night didnt make sense at first but then i though it showed the end of the day. and iv hoped for the end of a day many times.
its so different for me, but im glad i took a risk. im bored with the same old style over and over :S
thanks!
Its not bad at all I think its good
